Vines entangled
thoughts held and mangled.
Our hearts intertwined
by these constricting vines.
Why should I stare
when beauty fails to be there.
A gardener's heart
with the love that you mark.
I hold in greatest value
your love, your life, your virtue.
But can you see within
the love I have to give?
A contest entry
- What Do You See Now ? (Round 2) by just mercedes.
500 points, ended December 14, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like it. You have responded well to the prompt, and you saw the vegetal growth I pictured in the work. However, I am puzzled by mangled, constricting, beauty which fails to be there. Yes, I can see the love you have to give, and the giving honours you. Your poem is at once precise and enigmatic.
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I see vibrancy for words
choisest not just seized
extant in nature may I be on the edge of my seat with you at :
"Why should I stare
when beauty fails to be there."
if epitomizing it incises for sizeable pity when emblemotizing should simply be by the taking care of it, broadening our involvelment.
as "A gardener's heart
with the love that you mark." is circulatory in true requirements as fuller value can be felt but reciprocation helps practice sometimes.
biddable to be rereadable, your poem is premium to why I wrote and I reward you my AP comment points
blooming for new question,
also called
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