Jesus's blood spilt over holy ground,
Smearing the lives that surrounded him,
Choked at his conviction,
Watching the nails enter forbidding skin,
Hammered through stubborn bones,
Angished pain,
An angel tortured,
At the stake of his love,
What a mistake,
Humanity tested that day,
Sentenced to death by his own,
Stabbed, tortured,
On his deathbed,
Saved his sacred name
A contest entry
- [PIF] Anything Contest by brittany.geeze.
475 points, ended December 18, 2007, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is Beautifully written............
and I enjoyed reading it. I will allow it as Jesus was born of a Jew and it is in his bloodline. It is an interesting way of looking at Jewish persecution with Jesus's crucifiction. Thanks for your entry and good luck in the contest!!!~~Toni~~ -
Thank you for entering my contest.
o.o Um well, i guess it fits...I suppose on Jesus's b-day, as the main of the Holiday season, we should remember his death XD
Its definatly a first of this sort for me, and its good...very visual. -
I can really relate to this, You wrote this so well and worked in such strong feeling. thanks for entering.
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Great little piece, good luck with it
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I like it... even tho it's not an anti-scene poem, dont remove it... you never know if it'll win something.
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