Azure skies crisp, cold
Silent giants bare of leaves
Harvesting pumpkins, corn
Hay rides o’er the hill.
Wood burning fireplaces
Smoke worshiping the stars
Spiraling out old chimneys
No scarecrows in the fields.
Our days alone softly intense
We’ve caused stars to blush
Kissing frantic honey hush
High tide caressed the rock.
As passion slowly ebbs
Waters subside, hearts sighed
No more demure embracing
You, I turned life’s secret clock.
Windblown stagnation migrating
Planted beneath silently unspoken
Tender sweetness remembered
Newborn gardens, budding trees.
Precious autumn in radiant hues
Harboring our unique FALLING
We fell faster then colorful leaves
Flowing tidewater, the deep seas.
Author notes
prompt: show me 'I love you' without saying it-
or any of them words.
A contest entry
- A Moment in Time (contest by sinnastarr) by Sinnastarr.
590 points, ended December 31, 2007, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This was a good poem. It flowed well. There is a lot of good imagery here. You painted a nice picture. I liked the lines,
"Waters subside, hearts sighed
No more demure embracing
You, I turned life’s secret clock"
Well done.
Thank you so much for entering my contest and I wish you the best of luck. -
A great read, I really like the nature imagery that you use. The slight rhyme scheme that occurs at intervals throughout the poem and the use of assonance adds continuity.
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great poem
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you are clever conveying the words you cant say best of luck good write xx ppg
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Now this....is lovely
Great take on the prompt
ephiphany
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