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Liquid Heat

Liquid heat surrounds a very stressed body
As I lay; silent, within its embrace.
Lightly scented air invades my every breath
As I watch the peaceful flicker of a dozen candles...

Effervescent gel
Covers me completely
As my body is massaged
With its lathered satin touch

It’s dark yet peaceful; silent, with exception
Of a lone rhythm hidden deep within my chest.
I, at one with self,  give in to its beat
Complete, owned and lulled into peace.

Each breath deeply felt
With the rise of my chest
Serenity envelops
All that I am...

Author notes

A stress bath as I get ready for my FIRST date in almost 8 years!

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A contest entry

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  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    May 4, 2008
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    This sounds delicious. I want to take a bath like this.


  • Endeavor gold member
    May 1, 2008
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    Very Good


    Quite beautiful

    Makes me wonder how the date went

    Very nice

    Rick


  • drybones
    December 13, 2007

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    You are one of those rare people that have the talent to make the description of a hot bath seem poetic.

    Well done....

    Good luck on your date.

    Drybones


    • Molassis
      December 13, 2007
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      Thanks so much for the comment and the luck.. date didn't go so well... guess my expectations were too high, eh?

      Anyway, thanks for reading and commenting!!!

      God bless you!

      ~Melissa

      • drybones
        December 14, 2007
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        Melissa,

        After all you have been though, I think it is great that you have started to date again.

        Take some advise from an old battle scarred warrior...just allow nature to take its course. What is meant to be will happen. A line out of one of my favorite poems says it best.."Neither be cynical about love, it is a real possession in the changing fortunes of time."

        Set your standards high, but keep your expectations low.

        Fred


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    December 9, 2007

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    a beautifully relaxing piece...you create such serenity with your words! Here's hoping the date goes well!
    Rory


  • Daizy21
    December 7, 2007

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    I suppose you were in deep stress, never the less, this is very well written, thank you for entering and good luck!


  • troyias
    December 6, 2007

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    Lush Wonder

    Great write fluid in its feel, rich in emotions and deep in it's wonder . The flow and form are amazing. Good to see you back sis. Congrats on the new adventure.

    *Go with God* my sweet sister,

    Valerie


  • M0ofi3
    December 6, 2007

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    ! Oops! I stepped into the wrong room! ULP!

    By the way, awesome write, sweetie!

    I'm jealous...and not about the poem.

    Have a good time, okay! Just behave yourself.


  • ShelleyA gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    Hi Sis. A beautiful write. Very good imagery, flow and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Vivid descriptives of sight, scents and other feelings in this special bath. Good word choice, alliteration and nice assonance. Best wishes in the contest as well as this first date after such a long time. So glad to see you. I hope your are well.

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