Forlornly bleeding angst potential
safe within poster walls,
decibel muffs seal off reality
of unwashed unilateral solitude,
with bullet proclamations that spray
innocents; collateral damage.
No explanations offered, no proof required,
held hostage to hormonal dysfunction,
spilling from the tip of little knowledge
and testosterone infused bravado,
a fantasy of world changes
scribbled in school books,
and life brings a cosh across ideals,
when the gravy train picks up speed.
Breaking down barriers of wishful thinking,
when realism plants its seed.
Pledging accords to factory intent,
joining the parade of shuffling feet
main lining schedules as they inject time,
habitual users of the solvency debate.
Bullets are blanks, bravado a shield
to stop rebellion from breaking out,
and ever deeper they sink into morass
of conformity. Scrap book reunions,
motes of an age when anarchy controlled
that seem so simple, so trite, so right,
yet must be withheld for fear of derision,
must conform to this outlook of life.
Author notes
Prompt : Perspectives
A contest entry
- NO GREENS! - A Rounds Contest by Idle Mind Wondering.
1700 points, ended December 18, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Honesty Before Nicety
Comments
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I don't conform well!
I like this sad but realistic view on perspectives.
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"Forlornly bleeding angst potential
safe within poster walls,
decibel muffs seal off reality
of unwashed unilateral solitude,
with bullet proclamations that spray
innocents; collateral damage."
If that is not a teen I don't know what is.
EXCELLENT introduction.
Your transition stanza is gripping. How well you have run with your take on "perspectives". Very very well done.
You use soft alliteration and assonance well in this piece. A mature and well written verse and quite an impressive entry. Well done poet. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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Brilliant imagery crafted. I like the slight alliteration and just the direction you took the prompt. It's been awhile since I have enjoyed and understood such creative metaphors, nicely worded.
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WOW!!!! This is great Colin!!! I'm betting you stand a wonderful chance of placing in this contest!! Stunning work with this one my friend!! Good luck! Love ya, Cathy
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