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Blue Door (Etheree)

I
opened
the blue door
with much caution
to see what was there
would it make me happy
or what I'd see bring sadness
Gorgeous sight truly great delight
Then alarm clock rang with a loud clang
Scene changed once again, back to my drab world.

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  • Nicolette gold member
    December 11, 2007
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    Mary asked me to help with the judging - so here I am.

    I've written a few etherees myself and I think you did a good job with this one. I liked the theme of dreams too - you kept it tight until the last line. Nicely done indeed.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Cat gold member
    December 10, 2007

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    i've been using dreams as a reference point for poetry lately- they
    are interesting and sort of tap into that difficult to pull from, creative chatter
    that lives in the back of our brains.

    nicely done

    m

  • Virgoan
    December 9, 2007

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    I love your usage of drab in this piece. Simple yet effective.

    You are really a master of form poetry my friend

    Thanks for sharing

    VIRGOAN


  • maggiejamespoet silver member
    December 6, 2007
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    Great dream and great poem! Good luck in the contest!