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Time Travel

The secret to life came in a letter,
it was old and musty and sealed in wax.
Instructions said; that things will get better,
it opened the door to spiritual facts.
No longer bound, by a worldly fetter,
locked in the pages was how to relax.
I found the letter in a wooden box,
kept in a vault with my grandfather’s stocks.

I broke the seal and I read it out loud,
it told me how I, can travel in time.
My grandfather’s words were solemnly vowed
as he wrote the letter, well in his prime.
I now had the secret and felt so proud
I could move to a realm that is sublime.
I now had a portal through which I could pass
It’s simple as looking through window glass.

By now you must wonder what I have learned.
The present, past, future are all the same.
These wonders of which you should be concerned,
those that crossed over and did not remain
have traveled in time and never returned.
Just look through the window it isn’t a game.
Your soul is the portal, it’s like a door,
so open and look but do nothing more.

 

 

 

 

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Ottava Rima

An Ottava Rima is a poem written in 8-line octaves. Each line is of a 10 or 11 syllable count in the following rhyme scheme:
one octave poem. abababcc
two octave poem. abababcc, dededeff
three octave poem. abababcc, dededeff, ghghghii

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  • ellipsist
    December 8, 2007

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    a truly fantastic voyage - with a moral no less! those closing two lines are powerful, indeed! love the message!


  • jo-el
    December 8, 2007

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    visualization i suppose. we can visualize what the future could be...then make it happen. and how true though that you can never return once you cross over ...we can travel to the future at an excellerated pace...but we can't return to yesterday. we've already built some marvelous time machines that get us across the world in days when in the past it would have taken months to see the future we've visualized. i really like the thought processes here...and the form..rhyme..very nice. the mysterious approach also served this well. excellent


  • Swan song gold member
    December 8, 2007

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    I can see you are up to ypur nomral awesome Amera self and this was awesome awesome awssome Beautiful rhyme with a bit of wisdom Yo are just a master


  • Desire gold member
    December 7, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Oh My Word!!


    You do this form so well Sweet One
    Love this and the message woven within!
    This flowed like serene waterfalls
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
    Woooooooo Hooooooooooo
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~Desire~*~


  • L.a.
    December 7, 2007

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    I always enjoy your work. Thank you for interduction to ottava rima. Good Luck!

    L.ove A.lways


  • Ithica silver member
    December 7, 2007

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    This almost has a fairy tale quality to it. Or even a nurserey rhyme because it has a moral to the story. I love the way the whole saga unfolded. It was realistic and charming. All very believable...


  • WTF-Hatchwork silver member
    December 6, 2007
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    Right!

    Wouldn't want to collapse the solar system. LOL Good stuff.


  • captain howdy
    December 6, 2007

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    It is funny how people are eager to travel through time. Personally, once is enough for me! lol. Great job with this!

  • SnowLion
    December 6, 2007

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    Wow!

    I really like the opening and the ending to this piece! It's got quite a chilling feel to it. Best wishes in the contest and thanks for explaining how the ottava rima works too - I will have to try one sometime.


  • Twilight Panther Moderators member
    December 6, 2007

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    Truly amazing!...The flow is perfect and the story gives me chills Is not just like earthly man to never be content...past, present, and future shall be seen in its due time...I stand in AWE! of my Little Blue Star


  • sunshinegirl
    December 6, 2007

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    I don't know how you do it! You make all forms look sooo easy, and the rhyme is simply flawless. You are so good at them.

    I love the mystery surrounding this one! WOW!! Great job on this one!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • seamaiden
    December 6, 2007

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    Ooooohhhhh, this was a lovely way to start the morning off. When I saw the title all I could think of was H. G. Wells and the Time Machine. You took me on a much different journey here and it was might I say a Fantastic Voyage. The rhythm and rhyme kept it flowing smoothly all the way through and the form is an excellent one. I am going to get back to looking through that door. Let me thank you first for sharing this with me and say good luck in the contest. Well done dear. Keep writing poet. seamaiden ♥


  • PerVirtuous
    December 6, 2007

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    Wow. What a great message. "Don't Meddle. Just witness." I like that. Past, present and future are all the same. How fascinating. Thank you for this wonderful read.


  • hidingintheshadows9
    December 6, 2007

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    this poem was amazing. it told a great story and it was really mysterious. keep up the GREAT work.

    -nicole-

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