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Gazing At The Moon

To sit upon his solitary knee,
And gaze into his sad and soulful eyes,
With a name of Artemis restless tearfulness,

Looming in the mist and between the soft moist clouds.

Watching that youthful young fairy, Luna staring,
As if she's looking for something she has lost,
Her wings so delicate as thin layers of ice,
With dainty little patterns embedded like lace.

 

The ever-knew stars that seem so disrespectful,

And with little knowledge of his experiences or age,

Artemis, who has lived for forever had won his battle,

Of eternity and his right to watch over his Earth.

Such a saddened face with crystal craters and pits, 
So much pain and suffering he has witnessed below,
Little Luna fascinated by his telepathy,
Despite his dusty lips that do not utter a word.

Sat in his cresent enjoying the saunter between the clouds,

The wandering moon that crawls along,

As dawn approaches he lets out a tired sigh,

As the time arrives to watch the other side of the world.

Author notes

picture 1. funny this, I have this picture as my desktop, stunning picture, great for writing about. Good choice! xx


option 4B - Moon


option22 choose a word then find a picture to be inspired by ... link to image. http://www.oumworld.com/FairyMoon.jpg

option29 write a poem about a picture and remember to link the picture (see above) "Oh my god I got butter in my eye!"

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  • LadyOfFate
    September 17, 2008

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    very nice and very pretty. if the fairy sat any closer to the moon she would poke an eye out. nice poem. good luck in the contest. laters.


  • BabyBun silver member
    March 14, 2008
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    Beautiful - good luck


  • Hecate616
    February 14, 2008
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    very beautiful =) thank you for entering

  • karmacae
    February 12, 2008
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    wonderful job, great immagery, and good luck in the contest


  • Danna Hobart
    February 10, 2008
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    Thanks for entering.


  • Falcon Child
    January 19, 2008
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    this is a good poem. I like how you use allusions.


  • ShadowsMidnightRose
    January 10, 2008

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    This was wonderful! I love the attention to detail. Especially how you added so much goregous detail. I especially love the second stanza! Thank you for entering this wonderful piece and good luck in my contest


  • Walk-Free
    December 20, 2007

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    "Such a saddened face with crystal craters and pits,
    So much pain and suffering he has witness below,
    Little Luna fascinated by his telepathy,
    Despite his dusty lips that do not utter a word."

    My favourtie stanza

    Oh I am really confused with this entry, if it's good enough to win.

    However, i must applaud you for writing such a facinating piece on 2 characters (that I unfortunately don't know).

    best of luck in the contest!


    • Passionate Phoenix
      December 20, 2007
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      many thanks for your comment, if you click on the link to the other contest I entered this piece in, by Phantom's Angel, find the first picture and you will see the image I wrote this piece about. Hope this helps. xxx


  • Rinoasis
    December 19, 2007

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    "Watching that youthful young fairy, Luna staring" - I love this line! It sounds cute & dreamy. I also like the name.

    Sweet poem!

    Blessings,
    ~Moonchild


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    December 10, 2007
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    G'Day PassionatePhoenix

    Beautifully penned; lots of imagery that is tranquil and describtive.

    Interesting write
    Thank you very much for your entry and putting the option in the authors notes.
    Best of luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • Swangrnv gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    nicely done!

    young lady you keep doing your thing because your writes get more and more involving, and that's a good thing!

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