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Unthreaded

 

 

 

 

  

At night cobwebs sweep at corners
of this broom, seeking old silk caught
in thistle, fragments of dead years.
 

 

Desolate threads linger most.
 
 
Each longs for ancient web- knowing,
when a line breaks the whole will fall,
or has already fallen,
for collapse is universal. The first
fracture bears no relevance, beyond
the shared conclusion:
 
a quiet purpose is woven best
from centre. All else is tangled need.
 
 

 
Left hungry too long, the spiders
under breast, toil at weaving old to new,
recasting patches of hollowed net
while the middle ground stays empty.
 
 
Unthreaded, spent ends cling to grey.
 
 
 

 

 

 

 

 

  

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  • Cherokee
    December 7, 2007

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    I love the broom, the spider, the web... the whole thing. It was all presented in a way I hadn't seen before which is what I love... cliches that are anything but cliche. There is a real talent to being able to do that. You're poetry continues to be among my favorite on this site.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    I haven't read many in this series - but I will now.

    You know, I read you all the time but I have run out of words to say.

    I do agree with Suzi, not sure its so simple but at the same time, there is an element of simple to it.

    Really excellent penning.

  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    I like this, I think you're doing really cool things with the spider metaphor, but this one makes me a little sad, actually.

    Not certain I'd call this simple, though, hehe.






  • NurseChilly gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    dust bunnies!!!

    sweeping and majestic is this weaving of words...

    very nicely done Kate... very nice indeed... a sad place where the cobwebs grow and grow

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