Tiny soldiers climb the grey cliffs
Follow the scent; the goal is near
Crawling along the endless plains
Suddenly freeze - we know they're here
So much work but so much to gain
Search for the dead left behind in the heat
Still black spots perforating the grey
Making a feast for tonight we shall eat
Call to the empty, cracked shells of our friends
Scampering, hurrying in a blind rush
We've found the prize we were circling so long
The jumbled up orders may finally hush
Get to work, soldiers; no need to stay
Dragging the dark, brittle corpses away.
Author notes
Believe it or not, this poem is about the ants that I found in my garage this morning coming to carry away the dead bugs that had swarmed to our home in the heat. It's a disgusting thought to know that the ants wanted to take the dead bugs and eat them, but that's what they do. In a way I was grateful to the little guys for coming and cleaning the garage for us... but I don't think I can say that in any way that doesn't sound weird
A contest entry
- For the love of god CONFUSE ME by h202.
450 points, ended February 10, 2008, 64 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hit me with your best shot by De-Throned.
450 points, ended February 20, 2008, 33 entries
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Good write. Was interesting. Thought it was funny it was about ants. My favorite part was:
Tiny soldiers climb the grey cliffs
Follow the scent; the goal is near
Crawling along the endless plains
Suddenly freeze - we know they're here
Good luck in the contest.
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This is about ants? I guess it makes sence.... and I don't really blame you for being happy
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Lol thanks for the comment ^^
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O.O this was about ANTS?! huh.... that's thought provoking, indeed. O.O heh. i should have known though... it'd be a seriously brutal poem had it been about humans.
an incredible take and write, my friend! your word choice is amazing and you have the flow to match!
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Lmao! Yes, if it were people it would be VERY brutal ^^ Thankyou so much for the comment <3
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