smoke lingers in the air
resin on my fingertips
sticking to my lips
bitter taste
sweet embrace
how I love the way it makes me feel.
your strong arms around me
as we fly so high.
your hands holding my own
as I'm going around each of your fingers
[I wish you knew how much
I really love your hands]
your lips gracing my neck
each empty kiss
filling my heart
with stupid fallacies.
months have passed
the taste has faded
smoke has cleared
my hands cleansed of my past.
I've left him behind
to sit on that high throne
in that smoke filled room
with all the whirling lights and sounds
faded faces in the downward spirling crowd
to wallow in his own
fallacies and put downs.
I've left my pipe
my stashes, my lies
that stupid boy
all behind
for someone who has become
my whole world
and has showed me
what life is really about.
whatchu think? :D
Comments
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I really liked the opening of this piece. The descriptions are really nice and I think your use of brackets is effective. I felt a little last in between the second and the third stanzas, like I missed the passing of something, but I'm not sure what. That might just be me though. Anyhow, it is a good write and an enjoyable read.
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the stuff in the end is probably hard for someone who doesn't know me to understand, no offense or anything, you can't help that. XD but it's sorta going back to some old poems I've written about this same person.
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