You’ve lost…
An endless well of passion
A heart so pure and true
Love deeper than the ocean
You’ve lost…
A touch so tender
Laughter so deep
An enchanted smile
You’ve lost…
Nights intertwined
Fingertips brushing skin
An early morning embrace
You’ve lost…
Soft tender kisses
Walking arm in arm
Drinking from a endless well.
You’ve just lost….
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A theme of the point of no return...
Definitely brings to mind the saying of
"You don't know what you lost till it's gone"
There comes this very point in everyone's life
where we can no longer justify staying for to do so
is simply to continue under the guise of denial.
When it's over, it's over and no amount of hoping
can ever change that. There is usually fear of moving on for that is the unknown and probably the reason so many would rather stay in a loveless relationship that to have to start all over again.
There was usually a process of molding in many of these cases and the problem with molding someone to what we think we want is that if what we want changes we then grow to hate that which we have created. This is why it is better to love someone faults and all then to try to mold them into that image we have in our heads, for if we aren't happy with that then we won't be happy with the new image either, since true happiness can only come from within and not from without.
Hugs and Happy Holidays...
Eddy
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Still Amazing Me
How, oh, how my friend can you always read my mind and answer questions yet unasked? The wisdom you've imparted in this comment is more meaningful to me than you'll ever know. Thank you.
hugsssss and Happy Holidays to you,
Sundra
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well well done
nice.. very breathy and easy to read, hasa a nice wording and good rythem...there is onlky one thing i would change.. the world electric kinda stands out alot... you saying soft words like passion, ocean.. electric ... is so SpIkEy. i know thats sounds stupid.. other wise perfect. i love the "nights intertwined".. connects well to reader.
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Thank you for the feedback. Electric didn't quite fit for me when I wrote it either. I've gone back and thought about it and changed it to "enchanted". Thanks for prompting me to think on that more.
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Thank you haikumonk for the comment and also, for catching my typo. :-) I've edited to correct it.
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Makes a strong point, that I know! "you've just lost" says it all and so does "drinking from an endless well".
Nice job.
ps.
a little typo is in line two of first stanza: "An endless"..... rather than "A"
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Thank you. Amazingly, I had the thought of "You've lost" to do a piece. It wasn't until I was posting that I found this background. How perfect is that? Amazing.
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Wow,
A great piece of poetry for this Background here.
Perfect piece indeed! Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed the read.
-Timothy aka poeticweaver
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