Tear open my veins gently
What do you see...
Anything worth keeping?
Rip me apart
With your blades
You cant hurt me anymore than I already do
Split me in two
Do I have a better half?
Slice my skin with intentions to care
Oh right, you forgot to care
Spit into my blood
Make a mixture thats worthy of life
Peel away my scabs
Bite the wound
Allow my pain to penetrate your sedated mind
Feel my life explode in you
Is there anything worthy of such a beautiful scene?
Collapse on top of me
Grind your hips against mine
Feel me get wet
Feeling your blade, make me orgasm
Let me scream in ecstasy
Gaze into my eyes as you slowly torture me
Its like foreplay in my mind
Stab needles into my nipples
My pleas are for you to continue with your deliverance
After all,
I told you I wanted to feel something
Instead of nothing at all
Author notes
My screen name is Bleeding Eternal
A contest entry
- Dark~Like~Me by Dak.
550 points, ended January 24, 2008, 44 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dead Letters and Black Roses by Redrusty66.
650 points, ended April 23, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very nice flow and construction. Powerful imagery gives the piece a nice edge. Excellent use of vocabulary and kept me entertained. Thanks for the read.
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how powerful and so haunting, the darkness of it yet still the beauty lies inside, the love, want, need and everything, you deserve the gold
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Wow. That left me speechless the first time through. I love the morbid, sick humor you threw in near the beginning, and the words just struck me. I just reread it atleast twice. The imagery and devices you worked in were strong, and the poem flowed smoothly in its own sense. It was a wonderful poem, thak you so much for entering.
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Great take on the theme and thanks for entering my contest.
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I dont even know what the hell to say after reading that. I felt like I owed it to you to at least say something. Better than awesome. Man, I just had to keep going back and re-reading....caught up in the rawness of it. I really felt those words, quite a wonderfuly twisted write.
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wow this is hellla good and i think that this is really twisted.... you have no akward parts in here i love the whole poem... keep writing more
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