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barely beating

Can you see me
I stand before you
  naked
with my heart
in my hands

or have the stories
told by others
of the possibilities
of who I may be
of what I might do
clouded my image
and bound your heart
from joining mine

based on the opinion
of your best friend
who has never
   even
      met
            me
I know she tries
to protect
her friend
but her judgement
has taken you
  away
as quickly
as you stole my
    heart
which shatters
to the ground
as I hurry to
cover myself
    shamed
at being open
   to your
       love

naked to your soul

       empty handed

with tender heart

barely beating

   at

     my feet

 

 

 

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  • onapedestalIstand
    May 5, 2008
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    this was a really good write..thanks for you time..Sarah


  • BoysxandxRedBulls
    February 10, 2008

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    Powerful. This is so good. Did you ever get a chance to be with him or did his friends opinion stand in the way?


    • katzmeow13
      February 10, 2008
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      we were together for 6 months...but in the end... she managed to convince him that a long distance relationship with me would never work... at least thats the impression I got.
      He became so distant... that I ended it, not wanting to feel unworthy of his time.


      • BoysxandxRedBulls
        February 10, 2008
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        I'm so sorry that really sucks. It was his loss.
        Same happened to me except different, the first boy I ever really cared for just ditched me for a whore of a girl. I really thought he was going to ask me to prom but I was mistaken he asked her. He led me on and I fell a second time and I wish I didn't. He lost someone who genuinely cared for him even when he sometimes acted real full of himself. It kills me but I guess we we weren't meant to be together.


  • brevity
    December 8, 2007

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    your style is straightfoward, but sort of delicate as well? hm.
    but yeah, been there, only it's not just a friend, it's his family as well?
    no fun.
    anyway, i likes.


  • Indeed
    December 6, 2007
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    Oh wowsers.. this poem speaks about someone you truly love.. and a friend who took her away.. this makes me... well.. my friend's boyfriend.. i don't trust him with her.. i don't exactly know him.. he is skitzo, though.. but.. now that I read this.. i should back off a little more.
    let them be in Love..
    Great Job Homie..
    -Emily-


    • katzmeow13
      December 6, 2007
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      actually she(her in your comments) was a he(my boyfriend at the time) and I'm a she, but his best friend is a she...she didn't like me lol sorry I couldn't resist

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