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The dead pool (collab with Arumdamour)

Missing image
Deceit...

Laughter everyday all around me
Children would delight being with me.
Grownups would secretly fantasize
Of some sensual intimate games…

Into me they would dive…
Sometimes it’s more than their body.
I would always soothe their weary
Lives, muscles and mind…

Then, all of a sudden, silence
Children would delight in other games
Grown~ups have let go of fleeting dreams
For deeper rapids, in their glasses…

But wait….is that a crystal laugh I hear?
Is that a dream someone would lay on me?
In the dark and silence, things can deceive…
Just another leaf…falling…floating…~

Author notes

ahhh tis was a wonderful deep and caring insight Sarah left on this picture , hence tis a collab between us, her words and my picture    enjoy somthing from my wonderful newfound frinend and I    thank you Sarah

Thank you Joe for your inspiring pictures, for sharing your work, in words and pictures. Posting this collab on your page is such a generous act :-) i am deeply touched.

It was a delightful collab and I hope that our friends will enjoy it as well ;-)
Written October 28th, 2003

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  • rite
    May 5, 2004
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    When reading your imaginative and sentimental words I feel the pool tells the story of our lives... sooner or later every combination of matter is subject to decay, such is the rule of the laws of physics. But there are also (un)matters that are immune to any rule. Memories are among our immortal companions in space and time, as the pool or its visitors have. Thank you for creating and sharing.

    Rage


  • flowingwords
    March 7, 2004
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    Really enjoyed this poem...
    The image was fantastic to say the least...
    You both did a wonderful job on this, the wording deep and clever!Simply stunning!
    ~Kimberly


  • Graveflower
    January 4, 2004
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    Superb

    Quite beautiful this piece is. Excellent imagery through its words. It's wonderful.

    -Sara-


  • Desire gold member
    November 4, 2003
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    Awesome

    Enjoyed this very much~ The visual imagery says it all and the words adds that extra essence to complete the package~You two did an awesome job and look forward to more~ Big hugs and much love~Desire


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    November 3, 2003
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    Awww, the poor pool How lonely it must be. If I had it I would clean it up all pretty
    and swim in it everyday and bathe in the sun and make it all happy again hehehe
    Great write you too! What a pic LOL yikes, I feel bad for it.


  • maryannde gold member
    November 1, 2003
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    This was quite amazing....Sad too, to envision this dead pool and its memories of what "used to be"

    Wonderful picture and even this is very sad. Snapshot of happy times gone by, tagged with despair.

    Really well done colab...
    my best to you..
    Mary Ann


  • smae
    October 30, 2003
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    Aww wow, this poem had a deep impact and lasting impression...but the picture, i must say is dramatically effective...i'd like to know more about it! I'd also like to understand the poem a lil more though.
    Why don't you drop by neck of the woods sometime, I'd like to hear from ya, Joe! I miss you!
    Smae


  • smileywinks
    October 28, 2003
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    very well done my dear brother! Sry for the puter acting up ealier, oh well it's almost outta here! Lots of hugs and Love to you my big brother! ((((((((JOE)))))))) God Bless! And hoping to contact you soon! smileywinks (Veronica)

  • GypsyDreamer
    October 28, 2003
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    A wonderful job you both did. The picture is indeed inspiring, I don't think I have ever felt compassion for a pool before (until now) Very well done. Gypsy


  • BrokenSouledPoetess
    October 28, 2003
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    wow...just wow you too...I saw this on dA and was amazed by it there as well...

    Joey...that pic is simply amazing...it is so very sad in some sort of mysterious, secret way...

    Sarah...the poem fits the pic perfectly...I seem to remember that you are a fabulous writer that I have seen little of as of late...

    I do hope to see something more from the two of you...this is fabulous



    ~Rain


  • Morrowind
    October 28, 2003
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    That picture is truly one of a kind Joe!
    I still can't get over the trees out where you live Jo Jo
    with all the growth of leaves that climb up on the trunk and branches of the trees.. they are very mystical
    and a little creepy too! LOL
    Sarah's words went perfect with this picture
    She gave this old abandon pool life once again!

    A wonderful job on this collab Joe and Sarah!

    Much Love Always ~~Mina xOx


  • Kalexi
    October 28, 2003
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    Joey and Sarah

    This is incredibly beautiful

    Very creative

    Take care,

    Karen

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