Will you taste like winter?
Or fall?
All of this cold time I have waited
Holding my breath
in my hands.
Maybe I will stretch my arms
around you
and
lay my love over your face
So that your eyes
will only see how close
yet deep
the darkness of it is.
Yes,
you will taste
like winter.
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Love is falling out of my mouth...
and...
for some reason all the trees on my street still have their leaves...but they dont whisper from the wind like they used to...?
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I've never thought of seasons having tastes. Felt it here, though.
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"Will you taste like winter?
Or fall?
All of this cold time I have waited
Holding my breath
in my hands.
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this is so amazing, I want to immerse my being in it.
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this just makes me ache.
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if i could...
i would stand with palms outstretched, ready to catch the love against my fingertips as it slips slowly off of your tongue. then i would return it to your lonely heart, and like a puzzle... complete you.
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thank you friend
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Wow.
I really, really liked this. It's so simplistic and dreamy, but at the same time, you can feel the cold and the love all at once. It's got a little bit of underlying sadness to it, too, but that might just be me reading into it too much, or something...
Anyways, it actually reminded me a little bit of Sappho's poetry; the style is similar, but with a more modern twist and pattern. I love Sappho, so that's a good thing, trust me.
Great job.
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yes...sadness.....
Sappho you say?
I'd love to know what reminded you of that...
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DAVID
.....taht was pretty interesting..i didn't get it...bvut i kinda rarely get what you're talking about.....hehehehehhfipsdurjldjslfmklsdajfklasdj kl ... call me lol jk. i'll call you -
"Will you taste like winter?"
what a beautiful question......i love everything about this everything....
"So that your eyes
will only see how close
yet deep
the darkness of it is."
sigh......
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Most of the trees around here have lost all but a few of their leaves littering the ground.
I wonder what winter would taste like? cold and refreshing or bitter? Wonderful write as usual
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There aren't enough words in any language that can describe how much into your poetry I am.
And that, my dear, is very very rare.
"Yes,
you will taste
like winter."
The format is amazing but I love how this just pulls you in and out of the process of the writer's thinking. Almost like you're weaving the reader into the actual thoughts and feelings. Its powerful.
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thank you
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Oh this beautiful. I love the certainty of the tone and the images created in my mind. Wonderfully done.
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