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Escape

The ship of hope

 

Spirited away

 

The refugees

 

Leaving

 

The port of despair

 

Behind

 

As the death squad

 

Arrived

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Prompt: Hope Floats

In a list

A contest entry

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  • Vera Rich gold member
    December 11, 2008

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    Thank you for entering the "Human Rights - and Wrongs" competition.

    This is brief and lapidary - and in general I am not a great enthusiast for micropoems... but this one works for me.


  • Pandorea
    July 11, 2008

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    pretty good for a short piece; the abruptness of it suits the tone adn the theme of the piece.

    thanks for entering.


  • Pollycheck
    May 16, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my short poems contest. This is a sobering poem that tells a story that needs to be told to people that want to ignore.


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    April 1, 2008

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    This is very well done except I think it would be better read without the extra space between the lines. It says alot.


  • B Chandler
    March 20, 2008

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    Honesty, I think the double line spacing sort of works well but then work against the true aspect of what the conveyed meaning is behind the words


  • mysticstorm gold member
    December 5, 2007

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    WOW! No this is very deep and real...a sad truth of life well written in brevity, saying so much and I am glad they made the trip.
    Well done.
    Thank you for entering!

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