walking on
in this darkness
blocked by you
no light to lead me
where my destiny calls me
I am blocked by you
whom everyone thinks
is the best
why can't they ever see past
all the useless knowledge
and mirthless jokes
and focus for once on me?
I may not have the brains
but atleast I have the heart
in this world though
no one really cares
about how a heart is
just the outer appearance matters
even if the inside is contradicting
so for now,
until people are unblinded,
I will be in your shadow
walking
Author notes
walking in yor shadow~
A contest entry
- Many Options by piccola.
900 points, ended December 14, 2007, 9 entries
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Nice use of the phrase. Thank you for your time and for the entry.
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Nice poem (:
Felt the desperation and the sadness, and the 4th stanza came across as the best for me.
But there is a lack of flow in some parts.
For example, the last 2 lines,
"I will be in your shadow
walking "
was a little awkward..
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