Walking past the window as I see the burn victims
Tears stream down my cheeks at their misfortune
Shaking my head wishing that it hadn’t happened to them
Wishing to help them as the nurse leads me to the room
That has the most painful scene for me to see
Shaking my head as I cry seeing my father after the crash
Falling to my knees as I see him on the bed crying out
As Ron tries picking me up my father being unconscious
Crying as I can’t believe he got into another crash
Hearing the news started putting me into shock
before I crashed to the ground whimpering ”Not again”
Whimpering as I get held and walk forward
Tears falling down my cheeks as I bite my lip
Wanting to just scream and try getting you awake
This being a bad nightmare for me as I cry into Ron’s chest
Shaking and hiding in Ron’s chest as he walks me out
The doctor stops us to give the news that my father has a chance at life
But since its such a small shot we shouldn’t expect him for New Year’s
Screams into Ron’s chest as he picks me up and takes me home
Author notes
I just went with my gut when writing this piece. Its sometimes really hard to write a poem when you first see the title and try writing that way but what really can you do since no matter what if you think you can write that way then try. This is one of my first and oldest nightmares but with Joe there it is different because I think I would really be able to deal with it. Though I really never thought about this before the death of my uncle it really worries me. It shows that not everyone is as totally safe as most will say they are.
Written on December 04, 2007
A contest entry
- Dark writing (my first ever contest!!!) by RazorbladeKiss14.
715 points, ended September 15, 84 entries
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what do you think of it i think i maybe should change it
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Good one....
I liked it but it was a sad piece and probably shouldn't have been the first poem I read from you. I will check out another and see if this was one of those fluke sad pieces. As far as you looking for a job, maybe you could be a registrar at a local hospital I know it fits me perfectly!
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most of my pieces are sad and dark. i wrote that because it was the closest thing i could write about seeing my favorite uncle in the hospital with cancer and terminal.
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This was emotion packed. i felt the pain and anguish you told so well.
it was really amazing.
Great imagery as well.
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much appreciated.
Keep up the great writing poet!
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This is a very sad and painful poem. I love it and you did a very good job writing it! Good luck in my contest and thank you for entering!
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a very sad and emotional write, i wouldnt change a thing as this is exactly how you felt at that moment in time
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powerful
this poem seems like in the mind of the writer ... and that is such a powerful thing to write with i find that few can and still be good....... the emotions build up through out the poem and just unleash on the least few sentences. very nice wright
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it great the way it is its the way you felt leave it maybe add to it but dont change it .
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thanks that means a lot
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