As life passes quickly
time stands still,
to let me feel,
the hurt,
silent tears…
Did I ever tell you
all the mistakes made?
How many times I believed…
Believed everything,
except in me?
Do you want me to be
something I can not be?
Because that’s how it feels,
as tears fall down
and I am on my knees
Feeling empty,
insecure,
hurting...
Please give me one reason
One to give me peace of mind,
to rely on and to feel loved
for who I am…
I don’t want to lose you,
not now, never…
But as time stands still
the only words I read
are the ones that make me cry
As time passes quickly
the only thoughts I have
are the lessons learned…
Happily ever after is a lie…
Author notes
regrets...
A contest entry
- Cold Regret by DesolatELifE.
689 points, ended December 15, 2007, 29 entries
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ahh yes regrets. I have many of them. be careful they have a tendency to drag one down if you let them. this poem is full of sadness. I can relate all too well to this poem. the one stanza that stands out to me is the second one. I feel this way a lot more than I should.
beautifully written and the last line of your poem, to me is so full of truth. as young children we are taught about a so called happy ever after. something that is impossible to ever attain, because it doesn't exist. it was lie and thats a sad thing to do to any child.
kat
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this was very poignant.... it totally made my heart sink into an abyss that's so hard to escape from... in this abyss we keep looking for something that we can hold on to and just submit ourselves knowing that we can find a way to be happy forever....
it's hard to kind of submit to the fact that this place isn't meant for people who need love....but it's true.... i've tried so hard to find people i can surrender to...but who's willing to take that responsibility.... when even god can't...
life's a struggle.... and far from "ever after" i can't find happily "even after" struggle
i wish this poem rhymed but it's packed with so much emotion it doesn't really need to rhyme... plus if it's not ur style there's just no point
Pen On....
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So Sad...
Never have I brought anyone down,brought them up i get see ya around. So...all I can say is such a sad poem. Very wll written and i hope someday you'll find the one who never makes you cry, except for joy. The answer for me is myself is who raises my spirits.
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What a wonderful write here and one so sad and full of emotion and I thank you for separating a real versus a fictional penning as most dont do that and it often leaves you wondering..and that too makes this just a bit better even still. It also reminds me of a phrase i heard once that "happily ever after is just a story that hasn't ended yet". Nicely done,
Evan
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I really like
'Did I ever tell you
all the mistakes made?
How many times I believed…
Believed everything,
except in me?'
that's my favourite part. But I enjoyed reading the whole thing, it is very good, and full of emotion. Thank you for entering. Good luck!
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Love this is cool, its harsh in its own way...kinda in your face...I believe all of have had this conversation Excellent words to pull the emotion in this nad feel the tinge and snap of your words..well done....Best of Luck!
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Hey sis! :)
This is just beautiful. I definitely relate to the feeling of just being lost, and feeling like everything is a lie. It's tough. There's one stanza, in which I'd make changes. It's the second stanza, here's what I'd do:
"Did I ever tell you
of all the mistakes made?
How many times I believed…
Believed in everything,
except in me?"
But maybe that's just me!
Anyway, very well written! Definitely one of your best!
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I can feel the hurt and pain in this sis...great imagery on this piece. Loved it...and so true
Piff
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Sometimes people lie to protect themselves from what they may perceive as dangerous. Others lie because it that is all they know how to do. No matter what the reason is for lying, it will eventually catch up with them and when that happens...well there is a lot backlash and pain envolved.
I like the piece here love, you have a way of putting your emotions out there, you draw us in an make us feel you, how you are feeling...I get it and I am always here for you.
luv
J
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Thank you sweetie...I had my share, I am far from perfect myself too you know...And it´s sooooo good to know you´re here
Luv ya sweetie
XXJeannette
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I hope as well that this is not about now. I hate you ever felt this way, but I know you have. Great writing. Please let me know it is not about now!!! Good luck in the contest.
Jeannie
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It's a made up poem, fixed together by a Title and a prompt....and this is what came up in my mind...well it will be truth in some way because I see that around me all the time, and well, I had my share too.....
But not now, now is soooooooo good...
xxJeannette
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Oh wow twinny i love this, I hope this is not how you are feeling right now
I miss you, i need to tell you about my dates this weekend heheheheheh
Tasha
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Dates...dates did you say DATES???
Yoepiiiiiiieeeeeee....my twinnie is going to date
Luv ya
XXJeannette
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I accept everything as a lie, no one knows how to speak the truth anymore and part of that is because they themselves are living a lie...to them it becomes the truth, and so everything they speak & feel are to the directed...nothing but a thin veil of deception.
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