When first snowflakes
Fall right in to your face
They bring memories
Shivers
And chills
Lost names
Written with a stick
on white earth
a kiss
under the night sky
when stars watched
first snowflakes
falling right in to my face
impressions
still fresh on my lips…
5 December, 2007
A contest entry
- Let it snow in your poems!!!! by Tirrell.
450 points, ended December 6, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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love this snow poem...
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I am a no nonsense reviewer!
This centered poem is refreshing verse. You use present tense. Why, then, change to this?
"when stars watched". Try, "where stars watch" perhaps.
Lyndon of the Winklings.
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cute, a lovely use of freeverse, as this brings forth such beautiful immagery! thank you for entering.
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