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Duality Love and Pain

I've spent many days thinking, of what was and what could be
Knowing that some day one of us, would have to leave

You were my angel, my light in the dark
You saved me, and now hold my heart

We used to sit up and talk, about nothing at all
But now we've grown apart, and still have yet to fall

We tryed so hard, but knew this was on its way
It happend once befor, but atleast I now know what to say

I am emotionally without, this is all on me
I am sorry I caused you pain, I was just to blind to see

I thought only of myself, and my torn life
I never thought of you, and how you must feal every night

We sign on, and talk for a little while
Just seeing what you wrote always made me smile

But now I realise, I didn't deserve you
You always helped me, always got me through

But I see now, that I didn't do the same
I didn't deserve your love, I should only have this pain

I wish it were different, I wish you weren't so far away
But now I realise, You'll never hear me say

I loved you, you were my light
Even without, being able to hold you threw the night

You will alway be with me, a hole that no one else can fill
but atleast I will always remember, how being in love used to feal

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  • charmander13
    December 9, 2008

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    Yes, the memory is always going to be with you... but love will return.

    Anyhow, thank you so much for your entry and all the best to you!


  • XHollowXEyesX
    July 31, 2008

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    this is an amazing write. Without going into the soppy love side of things, you managed to keep focused and write pure emotion from the heart without sounding forced or fake. Not many people can do this and make it an enjoy to read at the same time.
    beautifull write.
    thanks for entering
    All the best
    ~Hollow~


  • Luken gold member
    December 31, 2007

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    Smashing

    This is absolutely wonderful. This is something I would write. Definitely. I can feel everything you feel because I have gone through that. But you know, someone will fill that hole. Trust me. I know that sounds ridiculous, or maybe you're already over it, but... you will be okay. It will be filled. I have experienced... and I have experienced it again with this poem.

    Brilliant


    • Burnt-Angel
      December 31, 2007
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      Thank you for finding something worthy of praise in my poem, but I dont think anyone could fill the hole if me and Lauren ever stoped talking... we did for about 6-9 months im not entirelly sure and I thought about her everyday, and befor her I was a cold heartless "asshole", she gave me back my ability to feal which was striped by a childhood of exile but I've found my place in things.... for now


  • GypsyEyes
    December 30, 2007

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    very beautiful. i can really relate...good luck in the contest and have a happy new year! love will come back to you...
    ~NineTailedFox


  • Fearful - Death
    December 6, 2007
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    What A Great Poem, And I've Known This All Too Well

    Excellent Write..
    -YFC-


  • Bite-2-Break-Skin
    December 5, 2007
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    This might be the last time you ever see me say this but,


    i love you GIM =)

  • Bite-2-Break-Skin
    December 5, 2007

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    I don't know what to do, and I don't knwo what to say either.



    It's not that I want to say goodbye, but I feel like I have no other choice.

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