Down into sand you seeped like storm
raging within this little world of mine
and joined those others afraid of life
here on this browning planet.
You were lost in winter, when bones were loose
with cold sag of harsh wait.
An audience of gray clouds
threaten weakest voices who refuse, yet, to give up
their barky denial even when whispers of change
maligns reasons to do things differently.
Author notes
Prompt - jpg and 'The Sands Of Time' ten lines
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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This is Amazing and so powerful. A most excellent piece.
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Ah, the last beleaguered soul refuses to let the world define the heart or the being. Well done. May we all learn to be as fierce in love as we are in our individuality. Potent with praise and vivid in our strength so those that tiptoe even when the water is shallow can brave the waves.
Love, Tom B.
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while there is voice, hand, mind, yet, let us be heard.
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Your songs are seducing Souls
to Hear, Feel, See, and Grow...
"Down into sand you seeped like storm
raging within this little world of mine
and joined those others afraid of life
here on this browning planet."
That was me, a short six months ago.
Powerful Piece, M'Lady!
~ Nicky♥
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I think we do not fear much but fear itself and ocne we conquer that, or get made enough to do it anyways...man we can yell loud and clearly.
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nature finds those seasons where a chill finds it's smile never letting go!
Interesting perspective!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill
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ty pen friend.... I refuse to shut up anymore... I am wont to defend my brothers, sisters, and the palnet I was sent to care for.
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Gave me the chilly willys with this write. These winds blew so harshly I felt it where I sit. Awesomeness! (you will find I like this word, alot when appropiate...)
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I have the same old, same old replies as well... I am going to start thinking up some new ones, methinks...lol
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This is beautiful in every way and amazing. I love the images you create. The fifth line draws me in especially.
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ty for such a nice comment.
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Powerful take on the prompt, great write
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ty lady.
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Sigh...This is so powerful in it's language...I love every line but this one is so amazing:
"An audience of gray clouds
threaten weakest voices who refuse, yet, to give up"
am audience of gray clouds.... such metaphor and imagery!
Lynda
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ty, pen friend...you know it matters that you do.
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