so scared by this thought
though it does not always cross my mind
when it comes, it does not creep
occasionally inside my brain, it screams
i don't know you anymore
i really don't
i hear laughter that's not our own
voices without our wit
clashed without our harmony
how fucked up is that?
i see some who move like you
an expression on a strange face
i see you in some lips
a quick eyebrow movement
but your eyes, they're irreplaceable
and i will no longer look into them
it's now i breathe so i don't break
a rare connection thought between us, i have to stop
here is where i have to forget
all of the fleeting moments i have told myself to remember
forever
down your street
starlit beaches, shooting stars
sand in my hair that felt perfectly in place
and under the darkness of the sky
we were warm
we were on fire
i don't know you anymore
i really don't
i used to think that through crowds
we would find each other
that we were cosmically in sync
i thought we were king and queen
royalty, powerful
now i find myself here
our beach is quiet, the sand unwelcomed
a cold black sea lacks our glow
you up the next block, sending shivers my way
so close, yet so far away
how irony can hurt
all these unfamiliar faces
with some pathetic matches of your features
they will not do
i need those eyes to melt me
keep me, shape me
to mold me back a smile
do you get nostalgic
for the magic of our moments?
right up the block, are you happy?
did you replace my eyes?
i wish for unexpected encounters
fly by you on fate
the words flowed so casually from your tongue
as they cut me up
as i sat there and stared
into irreplaceable eyes, this thought so scary
i didn't understand
no sweat off your back
"i'm sorry"
i used to think
the world would bring me back to you
i thought we were untouchable
in dreams, we're high as kites
beautiful
floating on the clouds
riding lightning through the rain
euphoric
i don't know you anymore
i really don't
maybe by chance, luck will find me again
i'll settle for temporary arms
you'll return my smile for a couple of hours
and we'll chat it up
crack our jokes and laugh
rekindle fireworks between us that the whole world can see
dance with a million colors, we will light up the sky
and our hearts will be warm again
but until then
it's time to dry my eyes
not believe in fairy tales
push aside possibilities of happily ever after
and not even ask why
i am mysteriously secluded
under wishing stars that only fall away
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Holy, I was just stating my opinion no need to be a bitter bitch about it.
I don't enjoy the word so as a beginning because it directs my view away from the piece .. but let her make the changes if she chooses to.
Don't go and defend her piece.
I am simple stating my opinion, whether she enjoys it or not .. her choice, not yours.
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Beautiful--great use of your language.
You should take out the 'so' at the beginning ... It makes it less effective. Also, may I suggest making it a less personal piece, and directing it in general. Meaning, take out the I's within it.
Other then that great, piece. I like this stanza :
"i hear laughter that's not our own
voices without our wit
clashed without our harmony"
Keep on writting
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hi chelse, i absolutely love this.
it is so effin' beautiful.
you're so good with words, i'm not even kidding.
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it's now i breathe so i don't break
a rare connection thought between us, i have to stop
here is where i have to forget
all of the fleeting moments i have told myself to remember
forever
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those lines speak to the audience, as well as the whole poem. you are a work of art, and an artist. ♥ i'm so happy i know you.
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wow this is so very, vry sad. but beautifully written.
fav line:
"did you replace my eyes?"
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i still love the ending of this;
it's time to dry my eyes
not believe in fairy tales
push aside possibilities of happily ever after
and not even ask why
i am mysteriously secluded
under wishing stars that only fall away
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CHELS!
sorry i haven't been around lately. i was over at my sister's place watching my nephews. and apparently we have gotten a virus that has been sending pass emails from mine and my dad's computers but it wasn't from us, someone was doing it with our computers or whatever. damn hackers.
but anyway, I LOVE THIS. BEST YOU HAVE EVER WRITTEN.
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This was such a powerful poem.. and so beautiful. Especially the last two lines. I loved it. It's always a tragic moment when you lose the innocence of believing in happily ever after.
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this was a heart breaker. this was so emotional
and this was a picture inside my memory
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