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Eve Alone

In this private garden
We eat raw apples
Dirty
Taste
Of
Knowledge,
But do it knowingly
So we will not choke.

That sibilant
S
          E
R
        P
E
        N
T
        S
L
        I
T
      H
E
      R
S
(But you ignore it
Like Narcissus
You care for Eve alone)

Author notes

My first attempt at DP so if it's not real DP I'm sorry I did try though

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  • SnowLion
    December 5, 2007

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    I'm new here, so I have no idea what DP is, but I do know I enjoyed this piece. I especially like how you ended the piece. Well done.

  • anaisnais
    December 5, 2007
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    Not yet familiar with this form but enjoyed your write immensely, very clever well done!


  • Abrielle
    December 5, 2007
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