why does life have to be so unfair?
I want to see the world tonight
through an alcohol induced fog,
maybe then I will see it clearer,
the answers I seek to make it right.
I don't want to see the world the way it is,
full of injustice, despair and hate.
I don't want to see the pain,
lingering in innocents eyes.
I just want to find something
to take it all away,
if for even a few precious moments.
I want to see the world tonight
the way it's meant to be.
Not this shabby overcoat,
sugar coated and fake.
Taking from me without giving in return,
making me live in flames,
dying from the burn.
You can't do this to me,
I won't let you.
So, I raise another glass
in tear streaked salute to the Captain,
and drink the burn away,
to find solace in the fog.
I want to see the world tonight
through my buddy Jacks' eyes,
like the way it is in the commercials,
so sunny, and warm, and bright.
Watch it all drift away
in a tequila sunrise.
Or wash away the lingering scent
of sex on the beach,
when the tide wipes out my words in the sand.
But the fog washes away
with the fresh scent of morning coffee,
and I hear innocent giggles from my son.
I know that this is not the end of the story,
that my tale has just begun.
Awakening to a new day, a dreadful day,
and no one can hear my screams for help
as they echo around the bottom of the bottle.
I want to see the world tonight,
through an alcohol induced fog.
So, I raise another glass
in tear streaked salute to the Captain,
and drink the burn away,
to find solace in the fog.
Author notes
Pissed off at the world, so sue me.
A contest entry
- Have You Sinned Today? by GypsyEyes.
475 points, ended December 15, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
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O indeed, I have certainly been there
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Judge #2
Sorry I hadn't commented on this earlier...
this poem is really good. I like the rhyme and flow. Can't really point out a fave part because I like it a lot. -
This really made me think of one my favorite songs. I liked it. It is very powerful and the flow was good. I can't give you any advice on this due to the fact that I have an addiction to pain killers. So I hope one day everything is made clear again for you. Thank you for entering and good luck!
~Dommi
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the bottom of the bottle is not a place for you.
you are loved by many, prayers can be heard, for your
sadness is heard here upon lines of pleas
pleas for those that care for you
to stand in your corner
dear friend
plaase know we are here for you
Riftkin -
I couldn't believe it when you told me the news turning to the bottle won't make the pain go away hun, in fact, all it'll do is magnify your sorrow. But you'll get through this hun, I have faith in you, if you fight you'll win. And like Passion said, you're loved and have many finds who will stand by you and support you.
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WONDERFUL BUT SO SAD!
Pissed off at the world so sue me!!! been there and done that and trust me friend when that alcohol wears off, that world is still going to be just as ugly!...The real life is those giggles and innocent little smiles!...One day at a time...Friends
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great write
And A Marvelous depiction of how I have felt before, drinking to was the pain away. Worry not my friend one day something will happen to take the pain away without the fog.
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Thank you for joining!
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This is so deep yet I know the reasoning..I can feel the pain my friend and I am so sorry. But the answer isnt in the bottom but in the heart my dear. Open it soberly and fight the coldness of the world. Intoxicated we can not function clearly....
You my friend will make it through the battle. They will lose...
you are loved and many stand behind you....just as i do.
In my thoughts
Tory
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