Now, Timothy the Troll,
lived inside a grassy knoll,
somewhere in Sussex, County.
He had a large den,
where lived kith and kin,
and he stored up all his bounty.
Everyone knows,
that his bounty was stole,
from families within the county.
One thing he can’t hide,
was how he wanted a bride,
from a human family.
A young girl he met,
whose name was Annette,
he loved her very deeply.
He acted, of course,
without any remorse,
and stole her from her family.
They looked far and wide,
for the brown hairy hide,
of the one named Timothy the Troll.
Until they found a place,
where they saw his face,
inside his grassy knoll.
They used gold for bait,
to lure him to his fate,
so was the death of Timothy the Troll.
Please tell me what you think
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I liked this from the beginning, but I agree with the comment below. it needs a little more to fill out it out. The ending was a little abrupt. I love the rhyme scheme and think it works very well. You managed to rhyme a couple of the last lines with the one in the next stanza which I really liked, but you didn't carry it in the rest of the poem.
I like this type of poem. it's like a childs poem but kind of dark in nature. it's sad that he would have to steal a bride. Too bad there weren't any nice girl trolls around. Most have been hard for such an ugly mug to find a girlfriend.
What inspired you to write this?
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it was kool
i really liked it!!!
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Aw i loved the story!
but i didnt like the ending i think you should tell about more of Anette and what happened.
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