Solitude, a companion in the midnight,
accompanies Sorrow in the silver moonlight;
mourning thee, whom I have lost,
within the harsh Winter's bitter frost;
roses shrouded in tears of ice
upon thy granite tomb, shall suffice.
Author notes
I chose option three - a dark poem.
Six lines,
six words per line,
and a rhyme scheme.
A contest entry
- QUICKIE - Options 6 Lines 6 words/syllables per line... by x--nocturnia--x.
333 points, ended December 5, 2007, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Contest for many types of poems, Prewrites allowed. by Systems Malfunction.
500 points, ended January 30, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Gold Takes All by Xx.Toxic.xX.
430 points, ended April 6, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Be published in the next Allpoetry Book! Theme: Grief by Kevin.
800 points, ended May 15, 111 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critique?
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wow. amazing.
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O_O
wow . . . REALLY REALLY GOOD . . . not even joking -
Good job! Short yet well written with lots of imagery.
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An intriguingly powerful piece. The title catches my interest immediately, which is an essential part of titling (though it might be even more catching if it was phrased "Cemetery's Sorrow") My normal practice is to attempt to find weak spots in poems so as to help their authors improve, and, surprisingly, this one has very few. The only thing I see that might, and i repeat MIGHT, be improved is changing the "upon" in the last line to simply "on". But I'm not sure if that would be an improvement or a degradation. You're choice
-Thefallout
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WOW this is very good! Consider yourself considered
Best of luck!
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Amazing
I loved it from start to finish...Such beautiful imagery captured in a dark poem. I loved it
The last three lines were my favorite.
I'm going to read more from you, definitely. -
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psst I agree
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