Walking home in the snow
the plush silence giving way to
thoughts of you
blanketing the walk
as thick as the flakes.
The idea appeared
as clean and pale
as the flurry around me-
I love you.
It wasn’t complicated,
tangled with thoughts of
if you returned it
or if I’d ever tell you
or if you even cared;
It just was.
A thin smile curled up,
hidden behind my mittens
-and the scarf you lent me
as I shuffled along
leaving love-struck footprints in
the quilt of white hush.
A contest entry
- ideas of simple by Melissa Gayle.
1000 points, ended December 10, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Teach me to LOVE by Jessi-desensytized.
500 points, ended December 21, 2007, 20 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Amazing write... so simple but you just have a way of making me see and feel it all!! Well earned gold ^^
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"leaving love-struck footprints in
the quilt of white hush."
i love the phrasing of that.
"quilt of white hush" brilliant description and metaphor for snow.
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I love the imagery its amazing, the way you related it to the snow is beautiful, you made the snow which I hate sound so good!
Thanks for your entry and good luck in my contest!! -
LOVED the "It wasn't complicated..." stanza. More than I can even explain. Loved the whole thing, really, but especially that part.
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Sometimes love really is that simple.
This is lovely, you took me to th moment and I remember it for myself.
Very nicely done. -
I love the memory of that smile that bubbles up and can't be contained when realizing you are falling in love... hiding it behind mittens
priceless!!!
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Amazing, this is so simple, and pure. I loved it.
"It just was." sighs, and it will always be this way. Well worth the time to read and comment.
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I am in love with this poem. The snow today put me in such a nostalgic awesome mood and this went amazing with it. It's just so simple and beautiful. sure, love's been done before, but i feel like this is new, i feel like I'm feeling it for the first time, and i feel like the love just dawned upon me as well. damn, i like this.
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