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Rage

Rage,
there it is inside.
Rage,
here by my side.
Rage,
boiling up inside.
Rage,
I am losing my mind.
The rage is feed
off of my body.
The rage is taking
over of  my mind.
The rage is building
up inside of me.
The rage is a pain
that i can not bare.
The rage is to
real for me see.
Who is this that
invokes my rage?
Who is this that has
invaded my space?
Who is this that
makes fun of me?
Who is this that
is fucking with me?
Who will unleash the
rage inside of me?

Author notes

option 5

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  • Florida Sunshine
    February 24, 2008

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    I think you can make the impact ~ with the word Rage ~ stronger by combining a few lines ~ it would make the piece stronger ~ to repeat is good ~ but try not to over do it ~ it you would like me to explain in detail what I mean ~ I'll be happy to do so ~ after the contest ~ please send me a message ~ This is quite good ~ and your strong with your words ~

    Thanks so much for entering the "Set the Bar" contest ~ I do appreciate you sharing your work with me ~ Best of luck to you !


  • hey charlie
    January 30, 2008

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    I think I may be the only person on this entire site that wasn't completely thrilled with your poem. It's okay, but not great. I took a look at your age at the top of the page and it surprised me that you'd use a line like "Who is this that makes fun of me?". I'm only 14 and I wouldn't even use something that childish. I'm sorry for being so harsh but it seems so fake to me. Just the same lines I've heard in a million other poems. Blah blah blah. Thanks for entering, and use your creativity next time! I know you have some in you somewhere.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    January 28, 2008

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    Nicely written.
    I like the repetition of the word 'rage' it really makes you focus more on what the poem is actually about.


  • over the rainbow--x
    January 19, 2008

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    I liked this,
    I also loved your background =]
    Thanks for taking the time to enter my contest [=

    There was a missing quote && option number from your authors notes though.

    Thanks for entering [=
    ♥


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    January 10, 2008

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    Nice poem Congratulations on the honorable mention
    Thank you for taking the time to enter this into my contest I wish you the best of luck

    Redwing Spirit


  • brittany.geeze
    December 20, 2007
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    Sometimes rage is fun.
    Sometimes rage is dangerous.

    Congrats on the trophy.


  • libithina
    December 18, 2007
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    Love the page theme, stirring stuff, Lib x


  • libithina
    December 18, 2007
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    Well expressed this frustrating emotion, Congratulations on the honorable win, Lib x x

  • Mercury Rising
    December 17, 2007

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    We've all experienced rage of some sort- from roid rage to road rage- and you've done an excellent job in expresses that seething emotion. Best of luck in my contest.

    David


  • ItalianGurrl
    December 4, 2007
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    oh man. rage. it lies within each of us. and once it comes out...everyone better run!! i can feel the rage in this poem. very well writte, with a few typo's here and there. if you go through it once i'm sure you'll catch them. good job though!

    Rachel*

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