Time is relative
My yesterday is your tomorrow
If we are lucky
And really stretch out our arms
On the chimes of midnight
Our fingertips may brush against each others'
And maybe our eyes will meet for a fleeting second
We can smile and wish each other luck on our journeys
And absorb a tiny little bit of each other’s personalities
And maybe we can feel true affinity
And learn from one another and feel true love
Author notes
time
A contest entry
- Time by silverscent.
375 points, ended December 23, 2007, 11 entries
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1000 points, ended January 17, 2008, 31 entries
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I love this. Its really how I feel right now since my boyfriend is in Iraq.
best of luck!
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I liked this piece very much and at present I have a contest running and the prompt is time, so I suggest you move this one to that contest and submit another of your favorites in this prewrite
Hugs, Bunny
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I liked the way you created a piece to join love and time, and with new year and midnight celebrations vast appoaching I think it's a very appropriate write. Thanks for entering.
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I like this. I like the wording, the mental images, the depth to this, and it reads nicely.
I can't pick a favorite line - I like it all and it blends so well.
Good luck in your contest.
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affinity...
Now this is very good! A wonderful expressive poem that deals with time and how we view it. I like the way you have melded this together poet! Great work! Good luck in the contest!
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yes a fleeting moment through time is invaluable, as each second,is a treasure. well done good luck xx
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VERY GOOD
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