often i find it difficult
to transform thought into word
for Thought rushes against the skull!
selfishly assuming role as King--
a Tyrant--
as undeserving as He may be
but word, quiet word
simple, shy, lonely word.
word hides.
word seeks a place of solace
within the humble wrinkles of a page
word-- however nonsensical
word breathes life into paper;
she feels
she weeps
she sighs
she loves
word. who is word? what is word?
Noone can fully comprehend word--
for Thought overpowers word.
Thought barks: speak of hatred!
and subservient word bends-"I love you not."
word sobs for lies she dare not utter
yet lies she brings in quiet mutters.
Author notes
I often have a hard time putting thoughts into word, verbally that is, but i notice that my thoughts tend to overpower my words. Logical thought, however wrong it may be, tends to overpower what i truly feel, and so my words are forced to give into falsehoods.
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I tend to do the same thing. Great write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
♥
whisper
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I really liked this one ... quite creative of a spin on this topic & nice, soothing descriptions .. well done, thanks for the entry.
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9pts...
Thank you for this wonderful contribution to The Poetic Bandits reading list
~Lilac
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haha great comments, thought provoking is always good
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interesting read, because logically if we take what you just wrote then we have to wonder if you wrote what you really meant or did your "word" get clouded by your thoughts ... lol or did logic make you pen something other then you meant ... lol either way, it was a fantastic write and thought provoking to say the least!
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Wow! I like! Definitely true, thought is so clouding at times
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"word seeks a place of solace
within the humble wrinkles of a page" What a lovely truly poetic line...great work. So happy you shared this with the group
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This was a wonderful explanation of how the brain is sometimes wired. Well done Bandit.
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I know this feeling well. It seems That we tend to think with our minds and not our hearts. The words we speak come from the mind, the ones we feel come from the heart. Great ork, you give the reader something to ponder over.
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It is not easy to ifind the right words on paper or verbally. I had to stand up to my friends this week when I thought they were being childish and I hate confrontation but we all ned to speak up for ourselves when it is important. I like how you personified word.
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I have that problem too. A tyrannical overpowering process is an interesting thought, But, I need them.
better the devil, etc. very good posting this one
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Very interesting poem. It makes you think. I think you have done a wonderful job on this. I started thinking about the old saying "Sticks and stones can break my bones, but words can never hurt me" but I think they can, and they do, I also think that words can heal. I can't say for sure who or what word is, but word is powerful. Great Work!
Love & Light
Debbera
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I like it Philosophical and lyrical and poetic a great write describing well the feeling of logic wining over your heart.
May the stars always light your path.
DW
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thought provoking
I like this very much. I know sometimes words just can't beat or bare all thoughts, yes verbally mostly. n that where the art of scribbling comes in handy to give vent to thoughts, right? I totally agree... But just one thing here, I didn't know 'word'is a she.
JK.
Love bob.
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Liked the creative use of space in these lines - and the thoughts you have expressed so well in this poem. Good flow and interesting title for this write. It is hard to find the right words sometimes, our thougths not expressed the way we want them to be.
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Nice title. An interesting write. Good flow and tone. Nice personification of Thought and Word. Good word choice, alliteration and nice assonance. Enjoyed the wordplay. Thanks for sharing.
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very great write i think you tackled your point good job i took pleasure it taking seat in your house reading your work
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