As the petals of my pink rose fall,
one before another;
a tear, my eyes free
for every second it still breathes.
There's peace,
etched all around her fading glory.
A weak smile,
reflects acknowledgement
of the love she leaves behind.
A soft pat,
and she's telling me,
she'll be waiting
on the other side.
The last petal falls.
My pink rose gone.
Will she wait?
Will it be
just us again?
Will we walk
this earth,
hand in hand,
when we visit it,
again?
Author notes
When you loose someone you lived for, wouldn't you hope to live your life with them AGAIN?
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Comments
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Beautifully written and you portrayed a wonderful sense of imagery here. I know that feeling well of yearning to be with someone you lived for.
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this is a pretty poem...mrssage well conveyed,easy to comprehend,beautiful layout,short and sharp lines...oh enough!....this is perfect!
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yes we hope to live with them again
a very sweet write.. your first kinda reminded me of my old writes.. one of my fav my rose lost its petals..
well i loved you formed the sturcture of this write
hope you get ur love as she turns back before u loos all u petals..hang on there may be this is ur rebirth
regards
abuyi
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