Home is where the heart is
And that's where I want to be
Laying there in your arms
Cozy in front of our Christmas tree
Here I am alone
Far away from my loving heart
Longing to be warm again
To never be apart
As the holiday grows nearer
And the weather ever colder
I feel so very far away
I just wish we were closer
And even though this holiday season
We may be far apart
I want you to know
That you will always be my heart
Author notes
option #2
I wrote this poem because during the Christmas holidays I was in New Jersey helping my grandfather because he is ill and the love of my life was in Va spending time with his brother that had a week to come back from overseas. We weren't able to see each other so i wrote him this little poem to let him know that i missed him and was always thinking of him.
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This poem is very heart felt....and I can tell that you love him...which makes him one lucky person, to have someone love him
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Good Job. This is very well written. I enjoyed reading it very much so.
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I too, long to be closer to people I've met here on the site, and grown to love. Yet, it seems all we can do, is think of them, send them best wishes through the screen, perhaps call them, and send them mail. Yet true love never dies, and some peopel can feel it, even through a screen. Nice job. And I agree with one of your previous statement:
"A poem isn't about vocabulary but about feelings. A true poet would understand....t's simple and to the point. It is the way I feel and it is perfect."
Nicely put.
Good luck, my dear.
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Thanx for the comment. it's good to know that someone appreciates and understands your work. The guy that I refer to in this poem is my boyfriend of 3 1/2 years.
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Nice poem ...
but it needs a lot of work to make it a top notch poem. It's obvious that you miss him and that part of the poem works. What works not nearly so well is how pedestrian the poem sounds. The vocabulary is so basic and simple that it doesn't really do anything for the poem at all. I hope you aren't separated long in any event.
Thanks for entering and Merry Xmas.
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A poem isn't about vocabulary but about feelings. A true poet would understand. Why use a whole bunch of fancy words that people don't understand anyways? You may have a wide vocab and I do to, but not everyone does. Who wants to read a poem they can't understand? It's simple and to the point. It is the way I feel and it is perfect.
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bravo
Oh, soooo very rooomantic and so very deftly done! A sad piece, I only hope it's not true! bravo... bravo.. bravo...
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Sadly it is true this year. It is our 4th christmas as a couple and I am stuck in NJ and he is in Va. I wrote it for him to let him know how much I love him and that I will miss him.
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