As another normal, bleak day goes by,
You're just doing things to pass the sweet time.
The schoolwork you're doing is rather dry,
So you drift into a slumber sublime.
Your friends may believe you are quite at peace...
But in your mind, will the adventure cease?
As you fall away from your sense of time
And conciousness turns to a distant blur,
You wield sword and armor that brightly shine
In a world where things of all sorts occur.
You casually turn to the setting sun...
You're familiar with this - it's just begun.
You go on questing for what seems like days;
Through the fighting, triumphant you emerge.
When all is done, you sit in glory's blaze,
Though as you rest, the scene's details converge...
You awaken from a once dreary state...
Can you go back now, or is it too late?
You find yourself in a place once eschewed,
Where life wasn't presenting much a thrill,
To find that your energy is renewed!
Now you can face the day with new-found skill.
When your mind drifts into a world afar,
Do you ever see who you really are?
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Author notes
edited: changed to 10 syllables a line (iambic pentameter, I think that's called) [12/29/07]
edited: changed title from "Do you ever wonder..." to "Imaginary Reality" [12/29/07]
A contest entry
- What do you wish you were doing right now? by strangerforeigner.
425 points, ended March 8, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Maddness by GypsyEyes.
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Very cool write. It seemed like a slumber without rest to me... the type of sleep where your mind is so active you wake unrested. Yet you still wish to stay in that world of dreams. I often do this. I wake up more tired than when I went to sleep, yet I wish I could fall back into those dreams where life was far more interesting and beautiful (or even frightening and exciting).
I don't know. I could have missed the point completely.
Either way, it's a lovely poem and all that matters is that you connected with your readers so well.
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Actually, you're dead on. (Sound familiar? haha. I mean it, though.)
Thanks for reading all of what I have to offer in the line of poetry thus far! You don't know how much I appreciate that.
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oh i can really connect with this poem! well penned!
thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox
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Ah, to have such adventure-filled dreams! Thanks for sharing this and good luck in the contest!
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Day dreamer, aren't we all. I like your poem and the wordiness of it. It rhyms and flows well into a plesant world of your choosing,
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Haha, you know what this reminds me of? The way my mind works. Sounds like something I would have thought up. Nice to know there are more really weird people in the world. This was a really great poem and flowed really nicely. But now I'm not happy. I like your daydreams better than mine.
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I think so, this is like one of those afternoon naps, where you're not asleep but yet not awake,
Great, now I need a nap.
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Excellent piece here
Oh to love and fight in the realm of wonders and beauty so is the mind remembering the garden of eden from another time . Wonderful write here
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Much truth in this one Great Write
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Your friends believe you're quite at peace...
But in your mind, will adventure cease?
Nope my friends don't say i'm quiet at peace, i'm annoying ..its fun and adventure won't cease in my mind ahah
Everyone wonders who they are its just apart of life
Keep it up my friend you have talent just like your cousin
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Well, I intended to imply that at that point said person was asleep, but it didn't quite sound like I wanted it to - the middle part was a dream state.
In any case, I like it.
Thank you for commenting!
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all day ever day my freind. every day of my life i ask myself that. you have done a great job. telled you u could do it. keep it up.
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