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a Little Rope Please...

I pushed the sponge
Around the kitchen,
Creating glacial till,
Until it overflowed
Into the garbage disposal.

Across the alley,
The twinkle
From the Christmas lights
In my neighbors bedroom window,
Cheers me into thinking,

That Buddha and the universe
Have decided to give me
Some slack
For the holiday season.

I think I might just
Ho Ho Ho
For a day or two
This year.
Thank you, god of the hemp plant,
For inventing the rope
With which I hang myself.

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  • Brian Balzer
    February 22

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    Nice twist!

    The title and the preview were leading me in a different direction. I was thinking a little slack in the rope with which we are bound by at the holidays. I'm not sure why. Then as I read it I realized I had hit on the wrong idea and that thought vanished similar to a puff of smoke and like so many pipe dreams.

    This reminded me of my reminded me of my younger years when I used to tye rope on a stick. More to the Christmas theme though I remember making a beautiful garland from some different types of rope which included reds, oranges and differnt shades of green.

    I like the formatting you used for this one. I'm a fan of centering when the line lengths are uneven. I think it gives it a more uniform look and therefore a more pleasing visual appeal.

    Personally I would tend to capitolize the word God even though you don't refer to simply God, but rather God of the hemp plant. By the way, just what is this hemp?


  • alicesparadigm
    January 24

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    Wow

    My first reaction was that the rope aka drugs were killing you or that you were killing yourself with drugs.

    I was a little confused though when I looked back to the title. When I looked at the poem and at your comments below it seemed to me that you think that using drugs is a bad idea, but the titles seems to sort of trivialize the issue.

    I think that this is a very strong poem. The imagery was splendid. I especially liked that you used the title "god of the hemp plant," because it very powerfully illustrates the power drugs can have over people.


  • Wolf Run0
    December 4, 2007

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    HOLY SH-....
    I don't like cursing. But...wow. This kinda slapped me in the face, you know? Uh...
    "Thank you, god of the hemp plant,
    For inventing the rope
    With which I hang myself."
    VERY strong wording there. I caught that you're...trying to get high this christmas season, and I'll just have you know, I'm a sharp drug-opposer...or whatever you call it. I'm against them ina ny and all forms, save medicinal purposes. Having said that, I like this piece. I really do. But...where's the COLOR? Relate it to a color, something you see and how i influences you this holiday season...Sorry. That was the intended muse for the contest.
    Anyway, thank you for entering, and best of luck!
    -Vivian


    • algoressister
      December 4, 2007
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      Hi,
      Twinkling Christmas lights have color....and, this was written three years ago....when I was weighing my choices.....I decided cheerful christmas lights, outweighed the "rope". Either that, or I am hanging myself by "hanging" around.....ttfn Laurel

      • Wolf Run0
        December 5, 2007
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        Then I smile. So happy that you overcame that little temptation!...Really, I am. Merry Christmas to you, and many happy new years!
        -Vivian

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