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Until Today

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I am always a lover of nature;
its seasons abound a complicated beauty
too immense to contemplate.

The mystery of clouds, joy of birds’ cries, ever-green of trees;
summer brown paddocks,
winter green-grassed plains-

glistening, silent snakes, rhythm hop of kangaroos,
spotted scales on bream
in slow flowing rivers of expressive love.

Through the eyes of God
examining my own creation,
I am pleased….

until today, when
I see the effect of man.



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  • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
    December 18, 2007
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    Your imagery fills the senses and leads to a strong ending! well done.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    December 15, 2007

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    I had to look up "bream". I LIKE bream.

    You have penned perspectives quite well with a hard hitting ending. Your artwork too, depicts the vision presented. I like this presentation very much.

    This is an excellent entry for this contest. it is tight, compact, hard hitting, yet is soft with its descriptive language.

    A terrific entry for this contest. I am very pleased. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela


  • Blue Rew silver member
    December 13, 2007

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    This offers strong contemplation to the reader.
    What does the divine feel when mankind soils the
    most beautiful and giving of all creations?
    Profound and wonderfully worded. Thanks for sharing.
    Blue


  • kao3
    December 5, 2007

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    If you see through the eyes of god you see mans effect?
    The seasons are based on perception? I like it but the scheme is unfamiliar to me. Any notes to describe the last stanza to a lay man would be appreciated!


    • R S Adams Jr silver member
      December 5, 2007

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      a comment to make me think...kao 3

      Through my eyes [ i.e. the viewpoint of God] , Nature is my creation in the beginning [ first 4 stanzas] and I can see it clearly, but [last stanza] I did not know that the effect of man would destroy that, until today.

      This is because I did not know what he was going to do, until today [the present], because he stuffed it up AFTER my creation.

      I gave man a choice. In hindsight, today, I see the effect of this. In the last stanza I wanted a sudden, brief twist for food for thought.

      Richard

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