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Threaded

 
 
 
 
 
There is no hour long enough

for empty

where air does not fill beyond maybe

or someday-
 
each promise a thread, spun

of night and dust,
 
where silk gathers wind
slowly

and the spider is always hungry
but patient under rib.
 

 
 

 
Every breeze captured

is hollowed by morning.
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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  • ardentMarch gold member
    December 4, 2007

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    every line - powerful, excellent...deep sighs in this one...
    "There is no hour long enough
    for empty
    where air does not fill beyond maybe
    or someday-"...your poetry is always amazing...



  • Rowan gold member
    December 4, 2007

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    such deep longing in this~ richly woven as usual.
    And you know, I never realized the missing pronouns till Nicole mentioned it, discreetly done, and effective use of device.

  • Nicole Hanna
    December 4, 2007

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    Okay, you wanna know why I like this so much (and why the reason is so strange for me, lol)? There isn't a single pronoun mentioned. No he, no me... nothing, and I LOVE my "me" poems lol. But someone, you've managed to make me feel this piece, despite that lack of obvious connection in the pronouns that most poems (mine included) rely on. I don't know how you did it, but I'll pay you to teach me. lol

  • LadyUnique silver member
    December 4, 2007

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    'there is no hour long enough for empty' oh how i wish i didn't know this feeling. this cut straight to my heart.
    even when you write from the darker side i still smile... simply because i don't feel so alone.
    this is a winner to me


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    December 4, 2007

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    "the spider is always hungry
    but patient under rib."


    Brilliance.

    I love that metaphor

    gold



  • Melissa Gayle silver member
    December 4, 2007
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    perfectly done!

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