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NurseChilly & Tireseus: Duet of the Morning

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Lover:
In the morning when God has hope
that creation was not a mistake
I find food upon the ground
fallen from your lips.

Venus:
Small morsels of mouthed words
like the sweetest apples on the tree
picked with your hand
a soft palm on a ripe curve.

Lover:
Banquets of platitudes
like the epicures of effete elite
snapped from trees of plush gold apples
to replenish the imaginations of sleepy goddess.
You are more to me than even myths.

Venus:
Your vitality is richer
than the fallen fruited words
of Gods and ancient poets
you feed me, from your silken veins
Bacchus pours the wine from your lips
sated dreams enchant me.

Lover:
Embouchures clasped round reeds.
Lips pursed in pink rondelets
of mobius strips of songs that
have no end, filling my head
with your words - drunken delirious.

Venus:
I cannot choose sobriety
from this hedonistic blush
this sensate bliss bleeds the greenest sap
rising from the mighty branches
that quiver on the panes
of my sleeping eyes.

Cupid:

You two are not free
To choose to be
Anything but bound
To sweetest sound
Deepest drunken dreams
Love bursting at seams

 

 

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Painting: Venus Chiding Cupid - Sir Joshua Reynolds

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  • Hectic Michelle
    December 4, 2007
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    this one is kind of long. however i read it and it is very beautiful. good luck!

  • tara wilson gold member
    December 4, 2007

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    OMG - you guys, this is absolutely gorgeous!!!
    I love the ending with cupid...so perfect...beautiful, creative poetry..my favorite duet so far....!!

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    December 4, 2007

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    For me,the first stanza is enough and worthy of three yellow,happy clappy chappies!!!
    My only suggestion is to please keep posting about the purity of love and just how pure it may be for it warms the heart of every reader ever burned by the brevity of reality.
    Beautiful from the first to the last word.Liked that Cupid espoused that their was no freewill but destiny...


  • Animarising
    December 4, 2007

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    Wow, this is tremendous poetry. It has just the most delicate use of language. Love it.
    "Lips pursed in pink rondelets
    of mobius strips of songs that
    have no end..." Coo, I'm purring like a big fat fluffy cat with a rather large bowl of cream.

  • Rowan gold member
    December 4, 2007

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    "You are more to me than even myths."
    swoons...


  • Nicolette gold member
    December 4, 2007

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    I wanted to choose a favourite line but I just can't. You two sure know how to harmonize your voices and I loved this duet of heartsongs here, this dialogue between Venus and the Lover (is he from Mars..?) and then Cupid's answer at the end. Yes there is no choosing, no freedom where love is concerned... just "love bursting at the seams" and bursting from every pore! Great duet, you two - beautiful - and the love is beautiful too

    ~ Nicolette


  • vici377
    December 4, 2007

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    beautiful

    I cannot choose sobriety in this hedonistic blush..wow, what a line..love this write..extremely good flow and wonderful imagery..the duet suits this write well..good luck in the contest..

  • juno0404
    December 4, 2007
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    Nice indeed.
    I totally enjoyed it.
    Good luck in the contest.

  • Amanda 88
    December 4, 2007
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    good poem!! you did a great job!!!

  • Suzanne Dia
    December 4, 2007

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    I was going to choose an image, but I can't.

    This is packed with beautiful imagery. Big love.





  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    December 4, 2007
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    for you both.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    December 4, 2007

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    Amazing

    There is never a time your work is read, and I'm not amazed on how talented your soul really is.. Such a beautiful, poetic heart sweet soul.. Thanks for sharing you. All the best in the contest as well hun.

    Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~


  • EvilKate
    December 4, 2007

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    This I like muchly, especially the mobius reference - one I, coincidentally, used myself recently

    love love love indeed

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