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Her Hair

Yearn to finger comb
Showers of golden sunlight
I’m never let near

Author notes

I only write haiku when I don't know the words to express the pain

A contest entry

My 2nd haiku. Please tell me what you think?

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  • GypsyEyes
    December 20, 2007

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    very nice haiku i loved it. the flow was was amazing. i wish you good luck in my twin's contest.
    ~Dommi


  • ThatONEweirdChick
    December 16, 2007

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    Nice. Your A.N do make sense...and I am trying to get into more of the haiku style. Yep, the last line really does get the emotion. Something so short says so much... great poem. Thanks for entering and good luck.

  • Gott ist tot
    December 4, 2007

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    Good use of sibilance here. I liked the imagery. Good luck.
    Thanks for your comment. It was an allegory but nobody reads it that way.


  • MissStranger
    December 4, 2007

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    well,you got me with this one!short poems (and so haikus as well) are some of my favourites as they manage to contain so much emotional energy within so little space!your haiku is splendid!the final line is simply devastating,bursting with despair!truly loved it!bravo!thank you for entering and good luck in the contest!


  • Tarja
    December 4, 2007

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    I am not really the biggest haiku fan in the word but this wasn't bad at all... I like the description and the creative word choice you used. Well done and good luck in the contest.

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