Baby, i miss you more every second.
But im slowly making my way through the cycle.
Im not sure i did it in the right order, but i did it.
[i think i might have reached acceptance now]
[DENIAL]
This is some sort of joke right, im waiting for someone to shout suprise?
I mean, you have just gone on holiday for a while but you will be back?
You cant have left completely, because you would never do that to me,
I know you wouldnt because you love me too much, im right arent i?
So whens it going to be game over, when are you going to come home to me?
[ANGER]
I hate you so much, and i blame you, for making me do this alone.
For telling me you loved me and then disappearing without a word.
For not taking me with you, for not even thinking about me.
How could you do this to someone you say you cared about so much?
How could you leave everything so unfinished?
[BARGAINING]
If im good, will you let my baby come back to me?
I promise not to make anymore mistakes from now on.
I promise, that no matter how much people hurt me i will forgive them.
I will love thy neighbour and turn the other cheek.
If you will just let me have him back, just for a second.
[DEPRESSION]
I just feel numb now, like my insides have been ripped out.
You should have stayed alive, i should have been the one to die.
Its all so worthless now, without you here by my side.
I cant do anything except cry all the time, and i dont know what to do.
I just need you here to make the pain go away, make me live again.
[ACCEPTANCE]
I know you arent coming back baby, and i can live with that.
Ive got my life back on track, and i know what im doing.
Dont worry baby, i forgive you for everything you did to me.
And i know, wherever you are that you are watching me.
You may be gone, but you will never be forgotten.
[R.I.P Dave Hill 12th February 07]
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Im not sure about this tbh, just wen you said about the grieving thing i thought to do the whole 5 stages thing, and yeah, hope you like! Not a prewrite wahoo.
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With acceptance comes the ability to move on, but there is always a sense of loss and from time to time we think of a lost loved one and grieve anew. It is ironic that the depth of our loss is an accurate measure of the depth of our love.
This is well done.
Garrison
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this whole 5 stages thng is so true. I know, my friend died and I went through those 5 thingss maybe not in that oreder but it did end in acceptence. This is also kinda the steps to getting over someone after a breakuup. Beautiful piece
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This is absolutely heartbreaking...!!!!
But an amazing write how you have explained the stages so very well.
A young life taken is a tragedy!
Much love to you!
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Thank you for entering my contest.
This was wonderful! No ones ever written through the 5 stages before, and I must say, I love the outcome. It certainnly does the process justice.
"All truth passes through three stages. First, it is ridiculed. Second, it is violently opposed. Third, it is accepted as being self-evident. "
~Arthur Schopenhauer
Which, most grieving people, at least that I've known, will agree whole-heartedly too. And there's no better way to understand a person, and yourself, I think, than being able to identify and describe the stages. -
yeaH greif is a b***h, i love how you portrayed it though, in the 5 stages. i love this poem alot, a new fav,lol.
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I really like this idea for this. The 5 stages, and then going through them like you did. It is very well written. Just one thing - in the last line, I think you accidentally wrote me instead of be. Other than that, good job!
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Yeah sorry i didnt notice that it is meant to be be, i shall change it
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