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Wet Talk - silver

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These are willow-words
being cupped from water
changed to woe

Tree’s wishes,
sinking up to their knees
in a flash fear of flood,
would rather drown
than bear this pull-down
age of yearning
for Peace:

a child’s body arching,
a simple stone,
and stuttering promises
on river he was born to

a father, washing his son
in herbs and sweetness
for him to be remembered by

a mother, rootless and restless
weaving her hymn of loss
into a choir of hoarse leaves

We have been ripped
from our roots
by the very loss
of one





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Prompt is:"Whispering Woes of Willow & Wine".

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  • ellipsist
    December 8, 2007

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    beautiful! a stunning write! from the very first line, I was reeled in... intense... a wonderful metaphor, great personification and lovely use of alliteration - an incredible and haunting write...

    deeply affecting!


  • Hetha gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    Every word, every line is beautiful! This is outstanding! Good luck!


  • Blue Rew silver member
    December 6, 2007
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    Dear poet, please do me the honor of removing your piece from this contest and re-entering it here:
    http://allpoetry.com/contest/show/2380964
    This write deserves much more than an HM but due
    to the quality of several writes entered here;
    I don't have enough shiny cups! My revised contest
    will only award three more from this contest with
    Gold, Silver, and bronze. I'm sorry for the extra
    work, but wish to grace this write with more than green. Thank-you, Blue

  • Blue Rew silver member
    December 6, 2007

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    The voice here is tremendous, moving the reader along to this potent sorrow unfolding. Brilliant interweaving of nature and symbols, and the life that is all around striving to give us deeper meaning.
    Blue


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      December 7, 2007
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      thank you. I am sure nature weeps at our losses as well... ty for the silver trophy for this Blue.


  • michael thomas gold member
    December 4, 2007
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    Beautiful. Words are never wasted on trees.

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