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Plague

  He says

He'll won't  forsake me
That they'll 

Ttry to break and

Take me
He says he loves me
And wants to save me
That I'm hurting
A pain so great

Only he can see
He claims to be light

And life
To be my strength

To take away the pain strife
He is my curse, my pain, my plague
But will I listen to

These voices in the back of my head
It's all he is
I feel so dead
Only I love you
He puts his arms around me
He touches me
And I wince
Lets darkness fill and surround me
Leave me alone
Just go away
It's you I own
He screams back
Don't hold me down
He laughs
But I already have you
Where no one can save you
He is my curse, my pain, my plague
But will I listen to

These voices in the back of my head
It's all he is
I feel so dead
Only I love you
He puts his arms around me
He touches me
And I wince
Plague
Lets darkness fill and surround me
Disease is the end
Only pain
You will never mend
But you hold me
Destruction, deceiver, Plague
Plague, insignificant
Falling making me bleed
Blood shedding

Heart breaking 

Addictive Plague

He touches me and I wince

My prince, My plague,  [plague]...

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it's sounds a bit crazy but i just can't say it any other way but this writing Breathing-Fate

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  • WanderingDreamer
    March 12, 2008

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    Well... I'm not quite sure just how to comment this one, but it's definitely "deep". Btw, love you background... ^_^


  • Selene Tremere
    March 12, 2008
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    He touches me and I wince,My plague...great imagery...I fell in love with this


  • loststorme
    March 12, 2008
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    I know how you feel

    I've been feelin the same way about a guy for days


  • I will stand by you
    March 12, 2008

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    This is a great write. I loved how you asked the question if you will listen to the voices. I hope you don't. Whoever the he is isn't the only one that loves you and noone owns you but you. Keep writing and keep your head up.


  • SkitzoFreakshow
    March 11, 2008
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    I really like this one i think this is your best one


  • Makinbettachoices
    December 22, 2007

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    This is amazing!!! I love this, sis. Its so dark but so beautifully sad, I love that kind of expression because it truly portrays the emotions inside!!! and it isnt crazy, it is imaginitive and free...
    "Blood shedding plague
    Heart breaking plague
    Plague, shredding the Plague Beautiful crimson plague
    Addictive Plague
    He touches me and I wince My prince My plague, plague,[plague]..."
    I love how you say its you prince and your plague at the same time, like its your decadence because its your prince!! Awesome!!! I love it, your writing is blowing me away sis!!!
    love your sis, x from the ashes x


  • MysticalRayne
    December 4, 2007
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    I enjoyed this write - feeling pain and confusion - nice job

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