Haunted eyes stare back at me,
From the cold, grey mirror,
Dark circles and bags,
From another interrupted sleep.
HE came to me again last night,
In a dream or maybe it's a memory,
His smooth voice,
Slipping into my unconsciousness.
"Don't be afraid,
I'm not like everbody else,
Look beyond what you see,"
Then he touched me.
His scarily beautiful clawed hand,
Reached through the darkness,
Enfolding mine in a gentle embrace,
I felt safe.
His whispers were all around me,
His smooth hands carressing,
Igniting a fire that seemed to burn right through me,
I wanted it to stop but never to end.
Hushed whispers,
Fiery carresses,
Cloaked by the silent night,
Only to be lost with the sound of an alarm clock.
Was he just a dream?
Or an angel?
The Devil's Advocate?
Or the darkest desire of my sub conscious.
Every night i waited for him,
With eagerness and fear,
Holding my breath,
knowing he will return.
To finish what he had started,
Until he has me screaming and writhing,
A prisoner of my own dangerous desires,
As he slips away as quietly as he came,
With nothing but a whisper.
Author notes
This is actually something that happened to me. I can't explain it, I don't know what it was but it happened. Scared the crap out of me actually until he touched me. Yeah, it's weird but it's something that can't be explained.
I'm "aligurl"
A contest entry
- Dwelling In Darkness. by artis.
600 points, ended December 4, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very wild lass....hip and sensual...
You have real talent creating and assembling a story.....very nice indeed.
Thank you so much for taking time with my work...
help yourself .....that was one of my few rhyming pieces...
I shall read more of your work of course.
Peace always,
LOWELL POE
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I really like this! You told your story very well. Congrats on the HW. Great poem!!
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This is a fine piece of narrative poetry! I thought it was great! (but I don't believe a word of it!) loved it!--also, look up "Devil Advocate". bravo... bravo...
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Good job!!
I think you did a really good job in writing this poem!! Its very good!
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AWESOME-WRITE'''
GREAT POEM!! YES, THIS IS ONE OF THOSE UNEXPLAINABLES''' I'VE HAD SOME OF THEM TOO, AND YOU MAY NEVER KNOW!!AT LEAST IT WS FRIENDLY!! I ABSOLUTELY LOVED THIS!! I THINK YOU DID A MARVELOUS JOB ON THIS!!SUPER-WRITE, FOR SURE~'GOD BLESS YOU'..I REALLY GOT INTO IT~LOVE, SHIRLEY ANN SHAW-RAYTOWN,MO.........
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I can relate to this...very well. And no, it is not something that can be explained...even to yourself. You can't help but wonder...many things.
I like your title, your wording is great...full of images and emotions.
congrats. on the HM
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Like a male succubus, draining away your passion,
leaving you wanting for more and at the same time trembling in fear of his next approach. Will there be a time when he takes it all and you with him to that darker place, than the midnight hours spent in his captive arms. Excellent write, one spelling error...His (whipspers)- whispers -were all around me,
Thank you for your entry.~~Artis
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Thank you. I've been meaning to thank you for the honorable mention. I very much appreciate it. Also thank you for the comment.
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In some ways this poem is sad, yet very beautiful and frightning. This really made me think wow I could imagine how you where feeling after this. Great write and good luck in the contest
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