Images shift- turn slantways
the bareness of the room, and you.
The wrong eye is closed in pain
yellow blue and purple form around
the brown, the open one that sees-
through a plastic cup of ice the
twisting, gray and prism colored shapes
that are an unmade bed and you- a
horror figure hunched with dripping ice
clutched to a painful bruising hand.
A contest entry
- A Cup Of Ice - ends midnight USA EST by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended December 4, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A sharp and painful image very vividly reproduced. The use and expression of the colours rather than terms magnify the horror of what has befallen...
'yellow blue and purple form around the brown'
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oh, glad the feeling came across, thanks for the read and applause, they're much appriciated.
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tears fall within those shadows behind those pasts revealed.. leaving one alone.
Interesting perspective!
Keep penning on opne stroke at a time!
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Man what an image.....this really has wonderful potential.....
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