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Injury


His wrist
brushed
hot metal, leaving
a single,
burning,
wrinkled leaf of flesh
to flare where
one imprudent gesture
would mark him
for his life

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  • sultan gold member
    December 11, 2007
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    This grabs one's attention ...

    I think the word choice is what does it. How difficult it is to avoid the scars that the inhuman side of society inflicts on us. How easily we can become alienated because of choices motivated by good character. These injuries are often not from imprudence. As usual, a thought provoking piece my friend. Warm regards, Sultan


  • Ellis gold member
    December 9, 2007
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    Very vivid description

    Excellent Writing


  • poetryality silver member
    December 4, 2007
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    My dad used to work with molten steel, never got burned but saw a flame jump up from the boiling vat and sear his friend's arm. I saw this as I read your work. What a moment! Excellent! I wish you the best in the Comp.


    Much Love & Happy Holidays ♥

    Renee


  • Danna Hobart
    December 4, 2007
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    Owwww.

  • Suzanne Dia
    December 3, 2007

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    Oh, ouch.
    Yes, that's true, too

    Makes me think of falling down
    and how long it takes to hit he ground when you trip, lol.

    Very good.. thank you for entering

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