Immersed in clarity,
it's like trying
to run underwater.
senses sharpen,
surrounded by
surreal simplicity...
And then a blink
pushes fast forward.
Author notes
23 words.
Prompt: Ever have one of those moments that seems to last a lifetime? ( 25 words or less)
A contest entry
- a moment by Suzanne Dia.
450 points, ended December 4, 2007, 13 entries
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Comments
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Nicely done. I could picture this in my mind and i liked your metaphor.Good Job!
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Great!
These are the times when elapsed time seems to reel out of control, when it is merely a second taking place... You have captured an instantaneous moment. I have had these "clarity moments". I am ever grateful for them, to say the least. Excellent! I wish you well in the challenge.
Much Love & Happy Holidays ♥
Renee
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I love the last two lines of this. I can so relate to them.
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Exactly. Time slows to a halt almost and then all of a sudden catches up to you, but it still feels like a year past when it is done. You nailed it
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