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I Can't Believe It Was Only A Second

                        You looked into my eyes;
                                      and it happended.
                   

                    We couldn't have stopped it if we tried.


                        I bet we wouldn't either.

                                  [Our very first kiss]

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  • poetryality silver member
    December 4, 2007

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    There is evidence of bliss in your words. You have a typo. "tried" is how the word is spelled. Good luck in the contest.


    Much Love & Happy Holidays ♥


    Renee


  • Danna Hobart
    December 4, 2007

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    Very sweet. Everyone should have a moment like this at least once in their life.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    December 3, 2007

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    So soft; so tender and so beautiful
    I remember the first kiss with the man I love
    A beautiful write!
    I wish you the best of luck in this contest!

  • Suzanne Dia
    December 3, 2007

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    I really like the idea of this, very sweet, getting some nice love poetry in this, you need to run a spell check, but aside from that, really a touching little poem, and i like the format too