what is the differnce when it all comes down to it?
whether we cut or rather we slit...
The wanting of felling the needing of pain...
But what is the differnce if we cut to deep...
Or embittered a vein...
What is the differnce if we just bleed the pain.
A contest entry
- Duel Option Contest by Dazed N Life.
600 points, ended December 10, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What's in your head and on your mind... by Nyxs Daughter.
450 points, ended February 27, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Point and originality by HellRaiser21.
330 points, ended May 9, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
so what do u think?
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Hey this is the best cuttin poem I've heard. The idea has always appealed to me.. . for pleasure. Never else. Wait... used to for else, but that's in the past, heh, ent it all.... ah...
Wonderful write like the rhyme scheme well done cheer up then happy
Tcha this was a while ago tho....
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You are actually right! There is no difference when eventually its going to hurt real bad! This is an amzing piece of work as it not only brings the pain but also helps in glimpsing into what the reason for pain could have been...
Thanks for entering and good luck!
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this is a great poen good job
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thankyou for the comment i dont think it is as good as it could be but thank you
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Could be better...
You could of made this poem stand out a bit more by spelling correctly, and by using capital letters where they are supposed to be used. For instance, differnce should be difference, and felling should be spelt feeling. But back to the content itself. It's a good way of showing what some people (me being one of them) are going through in life out there in the big bad world, and more people need to be aware of the suffering and pain that these feelings cause to the person. Thank you for your entry, and good luck!
All my best,
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Good. I have already commented on this But it seems you have deleted it.
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Very good
This poem was innovative, captivating and three dimensional in character. Simple and to the point. A questioning poem that deals with the reality of life rationally and with blunt force. Your words took stage and treated the reader to a glimpse of your soul as your poem pealed away the fluff and exposed a core of pain. It flows like the currents of life with a realistic crispness...so you can write as good as me when you wrestle free from you doubts and speak from the heart.
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I'd like to take you hiking up into the Alps ...
... where you'd lose your breath at the beauty of the peaks before the rain turns the path we're on into a mudslide that almost sweeps you away into eternity. There is a right door out of this place, if you risk everything for things that truly matter. All it takes is a passion for being who you really are. To me, that's the difference fellow poet. Your words upset me and make me love you. Great job! Warm regards, Sultan
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So short.. put so full of emotion, uncertainty, the loss of hope is apparent. The poem's asking a question, but not asking for an answer. Pain bleeds through time though, cutting's kinda like getting high(not that I've cut or gotten high before
... so my opinion's just what I think), you're so involved with something else that you can't recall the pain, but it's gonna be there when you wake up.
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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I removed the first "version" you entered
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thank u i was worried how to remove it thank u what do u think of it i changed it as u said. does it flow better?
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