Rays
prismic
strike the eyes;
the image bends
curves away from true.
Unaware of change, we
obey the pictured message
hastening through excited nerves
until the brain evokes reactions
presenting truth and falsehood mirror-wise.
Feelings dispose our responses to life
nurture and nature holding the reins.
Hate glows through love and anger rules
in rosy confusion's thrall.
As insights run riot
the mirror spins round
on image curves;
the ray bends
prismic
eye.
Author notes
This is a double etheree
A contest entry
- NO GREENS! - A Rounds Contest by Idle Mind Wondering.
1700 points, ended December 18, 2007, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Many interpretations can be taken from this.
It changes each time it is read within my mind.
Congrats on the award; the form you chose adds
an impact to the words. Blue
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I like this for it's description of the process without the need of examples. It has a generic quality that can easily cross boundaries and be heard by all.
well done!
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Ahhhh, We did say left align and probably should have said unless your verse calls for a different format. Please feel free to center this WONDERFUL DOUBLE ETHEREE.
Perfect use of form in this marvel.
"Unaware of change, we obey the pictured message...
Oh these are spoken truths. Very very well done with this entry. Wonderful take on the prompt and a beautiful poem.
Thank you for this. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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forgot the clappies sorry so long since was on,lol.
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Breathtaking
Hi. very good and clever etheree, one of your best, just got new keyboard working on J's computer, hope to have mine up and running as soon as poss,aml Di -
Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!
A magnificent double etheree it is from my grams. You evoked a reaction from me and it was that you WOWWED me with this one. The depth and imagery are fantastic and it flowed with such ease. I have not been to your work for a while and I'm very happy that I got to see this write. I hope that you are well and I have thought of you so often. I'm sorry we haven't chatted for so long. Thank you for sharing the gift of your illustrious pen with all of us and best wishes in the contest, although with this one you should have no problem moving on. Love always from your grandaughter, Joyce
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Hallo again, granddaughter mine. Great to be in touch. I've been very remiss this whole year - good reasons for that, but too long to go into. Am really pleased that you like this one and shallk look forward to catching up on yours though probably not until after Christmas. Keep well and enjoy life. Shall talk again soon
grandma.
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Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you grams! You are in my thoughts and prayers and may He keep you well. Talk to you soon. Grandaughter Joyce
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Hi Mum. A skillfully crafted double etheree. Very good flow and tone. Nice depth of feeling. Lovely metaphor. Good word choice and assonance. Well penned and much enjoyed.
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Grams, this is an excellent double etheree and a very good and different take on the given prompt. I love the whole metaphor here. Thanks for sharing, I hope you're well. Love always. Laura x
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